⭐️APRIL 2023: FIRST EDITION⭐️
HI THERE!🍹
🌟 YOU ARE WELCOME TO THE FIRST EDITION AND ALSO THE FIRST EVER AWARDS ON THE OMA_COMMUNITY.
🌟 THIS AWARD SHALL OFFICIALLY PROCEED FROM THE 20TH OF APRIL, 2023.
🍹 SHARE THIS AWARDS WHILE YOU WAIT☺️🤗
✨✨✨✨✨...
~Let's all give a standing ovation as we present to you...
Oops! This image does not follow our content guidelines. To continue publishing, please remove it or upload a different image.
✨ FIRST PLACE: 🥇 The Art Of Remembering
✨ SECOND PLACE: 🥈 Forbidden Fruit: A Regency Romance
✨ THIRD PLACE:🥉In A Silence That Speaks Volume
✨ Judge: @EmmeMoore86
OVERVIEW OF RESULTS
🥉THIRD: In a Silence that speaks Volume @OmaPhinaPhire
🥈SECOND: Forbidden Fruit: A Regency Romance @Lady__Whistleup
🥇FIRST:The Art Of Remembering @Minimoxx
✨✨✨✨✨✨
🥉THIRD:
Participant: In a Silence that Speaks Volume
Work: @OmaPhinaPhire
Book Title: 7%
The title is intriguing and it plays on Simi's silence about why she is crying and keeping secrets. I could be wrong but I think it should be "In a Silence that Speaks Volumes." Instead of "volume."
Book Cover: 6%
The book cover definitely has a vibe, but it doesn't really go with the story. This book seems to have an emotional tone and that would be great to come through on the cover.
Book Description: 5%
The blurb tells a little bit about the type of story this is but it needs to be cleaned up. There are a lot of repetitive words and the preposition "when" doesn't flow with the title. I'm also not a fan of the repeating of your username, but this may be a style choice that I am not the audience for.
This is just a suggestion on how to reword it, feel free to disregard:
In a Silence that Speaks Volume(s)
a marriage becomes unstable and a shadow of what it used to be when a wife's painful revelation to her husband unexpectedly haunts her more than it does him.
Grammar, Spelling & Punctuation: 7%
I noticed a few mistakes and some of the sentences needed rewording to make it more clear. I was still able to follow along and for the most part, it read well.
Book Setting: 8%
Plot Development: 7%
I really like the plot, it is definitely my kind of book. It has angst and intrigue and you have a way of making me want to read onto the next chapter.
This is perhaps a personal preference, but I think the chapters were too short. Not enough happens in each one, making the pacing seem off.
The flashbacks could also be a little more seamless, but I did like having their backstory on how they met. Through Praise's POV, I could really feel how much he loved and doted on his wife, and when her confession happened, I really felt the anguish.
