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Positive_Pages Hello author! I finally got around to reading your story, I was reading it yesterday but was tired and I was writing in one of my own stories! Anyways without further ado here is my review!
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What I liked:
I like the backstory of Emma. She doesn't have parents, and is trying to escape from family members who are greedy.
I like Emma's grandma. She is full of life and love and is funny.
I think the story is comedic.
The cover is decent.
Disliked/constructive criticism
I see that English isn't your first lan guage. That is fine. But, maybe use an editing program set to English that will automatically give you suggestions to correct yourself? There are some corrections are blatantly obvious, like you need to capitalize the first word of your sentence.
If you would try to describe your characters early on, how they look (maybe from the other character's perspective) then maybe I wouldn't be caught unaware that one has glasses ? Lol! I just think it would be nice and pad your story.
I honestly think the meme photos are really distracting, maybe add in a more funny description instead...
Is Yohan a boy, because if so, he is a nephew not a niece.
You should shorten the synopsis!
Conclusion:
As there are only five chapters out I am not really sure I really love the story just yet. But it has potential, thank you for putting your book up to be reviewed!
