Blunt Reviews

❄️You're alright, Larusso❄️

Creativity: 15/15

I do find this story to have some Great creativity when it comes to the story or something. There are some things that I would definitely change when it comes to creativity. Even though it's a very creative idea, some points of the story are rushed. And that makes the story feel rushed. But as far as the creativity aspect of the story, I do quite enjoy it.

Originality: 15/15

It definitely has its aspects of originality when it comes down to everything, which is a good thing because, at the end of the day, you want a story that is going to pop and have your audience wondering what's going to go on, and that's important.

Storytelling:10 /15

When it comes to the storytelling, we'll say that it was kind of confusing to me at first because of the way the characters are; I wasn't sure if like the main characters were students or if they were teachers because of the way that it made it seem like they were teachers. But then they talked about being in class as if they were students. So I'm not sure what's going on there, but all in all, the storytelling from the different points of view is very interesting to read..

Character:15 /15

this is what I love about the story: characters are 100 percent Able to grow, and you know me, I'm all about growth with characters. If your character cannot grow in a story, then you have overdone your character to have no flaws. Sorry for me. I want a broken character. I want some character that is going to be. in their feelings are a character that is going to have struggles and they need to figure them out themselves. I do not want a perfect character. If you're going to give me a perfect character, you better give me a perfect story. And by then, I'm bored. You can. Tell me these characters they are struggling with their sexuality. And their feelings now. I will point out some things when it comes to the characters that I personally felt were rushed. I felt at the end of the day, the way that the author did the characters when it came to love interest was completely rushed, like they met, and right away, it was instant. They had feelings for each other. To me, it was really rushed. Like the author didn't know how to. I don't know. Like they didn't know how to do it, so it wasn't brushed into an oh, my goodness. I love this person, or oh, my goodness. I love this person. It was an instant. I've fallen for this person.

Story Flows:5 /15

Once again, when it came down to sentence structure or grammar errors, I did not see anything wrong with the story, but when it came to the flow of the story, I felt like it wasn't 100 percent put together. I felt like it was very rushed and very unorganized. Once again, this is not to be malicious. This is not to be rude. This is not to be mean to the author at all. These are just things that I've noticed to help you with your story in the future.

Cover Design:15 /15

I actually love the cover presents. The story very well. And I love the way it pops. It puts you in your feelings.

Final Thoughts:10 /10

At the end of the day, I do not see that story as a horrible story because the story is not horrible. There is no such thing as a horrible story. There is such a thing as a story that does need some TLC or needs, some love or some editing, or something that makes it better. Now, I will emphasize that this is not to be mean. This is not to be malicious. This is not to be hateful. I will continuously say this when it comes to the author because I have been attached in the past, and I do not want that now. Moving forward, I would suggest that the author, when they are done with the story, take some time to really go back to read the story. And the reason I say this is because of 2 things. 1. the story does seem a little bit rushed. It seems like they did not know how to execute. The story works well enough in the beginning, and because of that, the story seems just thrown together and rushed, So there are parts of the story that kind of get confusing or lost in translation. 2 I do feel like there is some important details that the author should put into the story that are not there when it comes to the story. Now, I'm not saying that you should put their sexuality. I'm not saying anything like that, but there are. important parts that you should incorporate into the story so that way the authors, well, not the authors, but the readers, get a better grasp of your story. For me, it was a very interesting story to read, but certain parts and aspects of the story I could not. Connect with them when it came to certain things because I was unclear about what was going on. It just seems like you go from one scenario to another scenario and don't stop to finish the 1st scenario. So that leaves your readers kind of in this state of confusion and they do not know how to continue with that. On a side note, I understand that this is fan fiction, and fan fiction can be hard to write. But if this is one of your favorite authors or one of your favorite famous people, I do not know. These people, but if they are your favorite people famous or whatever character from a book or whatever. Then you need to execute it a little better so you can have their stories shine as fan fiction because the way you're going now is not flowing the way it should. So, it is not putting out the love and effort and story that it needs to be putting out for me. It is just a jumbled story that jumps from one scenario to another, and it is confusing even though some characters are confusing. Now, that being said, I will never say that the story is horrible because no story is horrible. It just needs T. L. C. If this story was brushed up, cleaned up, rewritten, or edited, and certain details were put into the story, it would be fantastic out-of-the-park fan fiction. But right now, it is in the earlier stages of the story, and because of that, it still needs a lot of rough drafts, a lot of editing, a lot of details, a lot of. Putting the pieces together once. That is completed, and the author has really gone back and done all of this. This story will be the best fan fiction out there. 

Chapters I read:3

Total points:85

Summary of the book:

Daniel is new to California and is starting his new job at a school called West Valley High. He meets the other teachers and one catches his eye, what's his name? Johnny Lawrence. Turns out that he's the biggest piece of shit that Daniel's ever encountered. But not?-----------------------Johnny is enjoying his life as one of the best teachers in West Valley High, when a new guy comes in, Daniel Larusso, who is so annoying and it's so obvious that Ali (the girl he's had a crush on for years) is interested in him. Johnny decides to become friends with him to get close to Ali. That's a great idea, right?-----------------------What happens when Daniel and Johnny spend time alone with each other, find out secrets and hidden feelings that escalate to something more?

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