StarKits Prophecy-- except i read it

Chapter Three The Training Under The Star

Chapter Three The Traning Under The Star [[wasn't the last one chapter 3?]]
OMGOSH GUkys im so sorry but SOMEONE glares at rainy days FLAMED ME AND I GOT REALLY HURT. OKKAY IF you dont LIKE thestor y you dont have to readit u know. [[But it's so horrible that it's fun to read. To make fun of.]]

Shadowclan run from the camp. [[There was only Blackstar, who is pathetically weak]] StarPaw smiled. Shed one! Noone cod hurt her family now . [[Yeah, cods can't do anything now]]

StarPaw!" said FireStar. "Its time we train!" I want to show you how to fight!" [[Blackstar just attacked and basically no one cares]]

"Ok." Sad StarPaw happl;y. "but yo just saw I culd fight, write?" [[A newborn kit could slash its claws at some moss]]  "Well, ya." said FireStar. "But I wnted tol see if that was all you new."

"Ok." They went to the frost togather and the other cats cleaned jp the bodies. [[Bodies? BODIES!?]] "Ok StarPaw" said Firestar one they got their. "We'll start with how to dog." [[Barf, Bark, Bork, Borf.]]

"Cmon thas too easy!" yelled StarPaw. Shed just beat BlackStar she was ready for anything! [[Sure...]]

"ok Ok" mewled FiresTar, lets learn how to claw an oponit. [[Because dodg-ahem, dogging is so much easier]]

"Ya." Yowled Starkit. She jumped at FireStar not Giving hiM time to attakc. "She hit his side he didn't move he was to surprise.d she clawed him and he started bledding. "wow StarPaw" he said ".Your doing awesome." [[Firestar. You're apprentice just drew blood and you just congratulated her? It's like your friend stabbed you and you go "nice job with that stabbing, you have good aim"]] "Really?" gaped StarPaw. She didn't think she was doing that god was she relly special like the porphesy meowed? [[Uh, okay. Meowed.]]

"Yes StarPaw." Snarled Firestar. [[Firestar is suddenly mad]] "I couldnteven get away in fast enough. Only scourg was did that before.,"

"OMGOSH REALLY?" asked StarPaw. Scourg?1? THE SCOURG? [[Just pay attention to your delusional mentor]] She dherad so muchj about him he was really evil and killed alot of cats. "I'M LIKE SCOURG? [[Shut it]] "I didnt mean it like that" FirePaw sad fastly. "I ment you wer a good fighter. Its really cool." At that minute he thought to himself 'Starpaws so kawaii look at her eys and her fur. [[This is too much. TOO MUCH]]

"Oh ok thanks." They trained floor awhile later StarPaw beat FireStar 8 times once she let him win to make him fel bettar and b y the last one she was alittle tired. [[A.K.A, Starkit made him bleed eight more times. Good job.]]

"Hey FireStar can we hunt now." Said StarPaw. "im kinda hungry." [[Because everything is about you.]]

"Oh we'll if you want." Firestar was disappointed he and; starPaw had been having so much fun. [[So much fun killing you]] So they went huntng, StarPaw messed up a couple times but FireStar said it was okaysince it was only her second time (she'd had her first time when she was a littlekit and she and FireStar had snuck out together that's why he chose her as his apprentice_. [[That's against the warrior code and that's a pitiful excuse for a cliché]]

Later that night StarPaw locked up at the stars. She and Firestar had'd so much fun this day. Theyd brung back enough food for the hole clan. [[That's definitely possible]]

Locking upn at the stars she turned to her best friend, JazzPaw, and said, "Do you think well ever be up there." [[Hopefully by the next word]]

"Ya totally." Said JazzPaww. [[Darn it]] "I mean youll be l,eader and I'll be depudy one day well have too!" [[Have two?]]

"Ya." Said StarPaw smiling she loved JazzPaw NOT IN THAT WAY U SICKOS!) [[Shut you trap]] they were best friends. She loked up at the stars again and smiled and fell asleep wit the Starcaln voices whisper in her head. [[Just falling asleep. Out in the open.]]

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[[This is titled *The Training Under the Star* but stars only appeared at the end of the short chapter]]