[Riven]
1. Forced - _arasthetic
Judge #1
Title: [1/2]
Cover: [1/3]
Description: [3/4]
Hook: [3.5/5]
Unique: [2.5/5]
Flow: [4/5]
Delivery: [3.5/5]
Pacing: [4/5]
Sequence of Events: [5/5]
Writing Style: [8.5/10]
Reader EI: [7/10]
Characters EI: [8.5/10]
Character Dev: [9.5/10]
Logic: [10/10]
Grammar: [9.5/10]
Vocab: [9.5/10]
Overall: [6/10]
Satisfaction: [4/5]
Total: [100/124]
Review
Title→ It suits the book, but it's not eye candy.
Cover→ It's good, but it neither relates to the book nor gives off the vibe of it. I mean that the cover feels cold while the book is warm, also the book is a sweet love story, but the cover feels like Jungkook was trying to get over a heartbreak.
Description→ It shows what the book is about but lacks that spark to lure readers, maybe if you included a few catchy lines from the book, it would work well.
Plot→ It wasn't unique at all even though you mentioned in the preface that (''it's just one of those arranged marriage fics" because it isn't.) I expected something out of the ordinary to happen, but till the last chapter nothing surprised me. Also, adding Jeon Junghyun doesn't increase the uniqueness of a book. (Don't give your readers high expectations.)
I've noticed that you like skipping onto the next event without saying what happened in between. Like Jk's birthday, their wedding, waking Jk next Monday...etc I think you got what I mean. It's better if you reduced the use of time skips because it disconnects the reader for a brief moment. The ending was so rushed, and that sudden drama too didn't make an impact, it only broke the flow.
Writing style → The dialogues were good and also there were decent interactions between the characters, but there was a lack of description for mostly emotions.
Gram/Vocab→ I bet English is your first language. It shows from your writing, but I'm gonna tell you, you love to mix up him/her/she & him xD I've pointed out one of those mistakes while reading, and I'm gonna tell you, you have a lot of them, so just go slowly through the chapters, and I'm sure you'll point them out.
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