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In this chapter, we will review: Hacienda Silverio #1: The Castle In Your Eyes by nyariina.
The first three parts of this story that we are going to review are Prologue, Kabanata 1, and Kabanata 2.
PROLOGUE
• Metaphoric ang atake ng introduction o umpisa ng Prologue. Maganda rin ang pagkakasulat sa introduction na bumungad sa akin sa Prologue na ito.
Okay lang namang ganitong approach (metaphoric approach) ang gamiting pambungad sa isang nobela. Kaya lang, kailangan puliduhin ang execution pagdating dito sa nobela na ito. After kasi nung metaphoric na intro, biglang kabig sa eksena na hindi mo agad makikitaan ng koneksyon sa metaphors na sinasaad sa unang bahagi ng Prologue. In other words, the first parts of Prologue already lacked coherence with the middle part of the chapter.
• What is Coherence?
Tinatawag na may coherence ang isang akda kapag konektado o iisa ang idea ng bawat paragraph. Mahalaga ito para maunawaan ng readers ang mensaheng nais iparating ng author. An effective coherence give a story its smooth flow. Like our thoughts, dapat smooth din ang daloy ng mga kataga habang binabasa ng reader.
Kung aanalisahin ang metaphoric intro sa Prologue na ito, here’s the ideas per section in their order of appearance:
1st: Life is a hard. It’s our choice how to overcome it.
2nd: The author/character sites some recommendations on how to ease the pain we experience. Because if life is beautiful, life can be also painful. And pain makes life hard.
3rd: This part sites that other people cannot choose between overcoming struggles or bearing the pain life brings. So instead, they choose to just end their struggle.
4th: “Dreaming is my escape but it is hampered by my cowardice.”
Explains that the character/speaker’s way of overcoming life’s struggles used to be through her dreams (her career). But that capability to cope using that method (a.k.a. escape) was lost through her cowardice (fears/traumas).
5th: “I stood in front of the reporters surrounding the place.”
In this part, we began losing the coherence. From talking about life is a struggle, biglang nagbago ang visualization sa isip ng reader. It feels like watching a romance movie and someone suddenly decided to change the channel to a sports coverage. We began seeing how glamorized life is for Criseana— being sought after and admired by people, she gets a lot of attention from lots of reporters, she has stylish clothes, a lavish car, a private plane and people who accommodates her at her beck and call which doesn’t exactly match with the “life is a struggle” introduction
6th: Balik sa “Life is a struggle” concept where Criseana complains about reporters and her privacy. Then segway to a new metaphor about dreams versus freedom.
