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×. ❜The Cupid Complex [Rev. Mon]

Book name: The Cupid Complex

Author:  4everSherlocked

Reviewer: sprite_and_hamburger

Cover: 1/5
Title, cover, and synopsis are the first thing people notice while finding a good book so a good impression is needed for that. The cover if I can call it, is not something I would like in this book. It was just a colorful background with Tae's and Jungkook's pics on that. Both pics that are used in the cover aren't matching with each other, their filters are different from one another. The quality of the cover is blurry, the name of the author and "written by" are blurry on the cover. You need to replace this cover and make a good one by using the same genre pics with the same filter.  The font is good for the plot but the background pic is a big no.

Title: 4/5
I love the title "the cupid complex" it is interesting and goes with the plot as well. The title sounds interesting and also gives an idea of the story which is a good thing. The title was the thing that caught my interest at first glance.

Synopsis: 4/10
When you read a synopsis you get an idea of the story which includes some dialogues or some theory about the story. The theory you wrote in the description is more like a summary than a synopsis. If someone reads it they will know what is the exact not the idea. You need to make a description that will give an idea and not reveal the whole plot in the description.

Execution: 6/10
A good story needs a perfect execution because having a nice plot with bad execution won't do anything good to your story. The idea of the story is amazing I admit, cupid falling in love with a human than getting a curse and living as a human with no recollection of memories. It is a very beautiful plot but the problem is execution. Things are running like a bullet train and we can't feel the vibe between the protagonist. There's a scene where Jungkook and Ame ran away together, there was no information on where they went and how they spent the rest of their time. It was simply ended with a paragraph including "they went on a walk and danced together" that's all, other than that we don't know anything about it. Both protagonists didn't question anything and just went window shopping just like that, you could have added some protest or denying before this to make it more realistic.

Plot: 15/20
The story starts with Jungkook the cupid's son trying to make people fall in love and have some fun then here comes our female protagonist Ame. Ame entered the cafe with her fiancé, their relationship was breaking apart and in that all chaos she throw her heels. Jungkook tried to save Ame from her fiancé's punch and that's how both of them end up running from there and spending their evening together. Somehow both of them fell in love, this all happened in just some hours. Tbh I couldn't get myself to match the pace of the plot because it was going way too fast. They just met and fell in love and not only that the story took 180 degree turn and then Jungkook is a part of the BTS boy band. There are many plot holes throughout the story, Jungkook and Tae becomes BTS members, and how? We don't know it. There are many things that are unexplained but still exist in the story. Jungkook's dad was nowhere in the scenes but suddenly jungkook was having a conversation with his dad and his dad just dismissed him and sent him to Earth just like that? Ame suddenly getting the VIP tickets of their concert easily, things can't be more unrealistic. The scenes are just coming and going  and the story is running way too fast. The idea of the story is amazing but the way scenes take place is not right. You need slow down your pace and try to add some emotions into your story because right they are just words trying to look like a story.

Writing style: 17/20
The writing style of the book is impressive, you know basic rules of writing which can be seen throughout the book. There is hardly anything I could point out but there is a constant style you are using in your story. Every other sentence is ending with "he said, she said, I said blah blah". It's making your dialogues look like a ping pong ball game and making it bland/boring. You can change it by adding some action tags instead of verbal tags because in real life we don't sit and just talk even if we are having a conversation on the couch, right? We move our bodies from time to time, staring at the wall or space out.

Grammar & vocabulary: 19.5/20
Hands down! This is the most perfect grammar I have read in the fanfiction world. You know how to punctuate dialogues or the use of ellipsis. Minor things like hyphens in a stuttering conversation, there was almost no mistake in the book related to grammar. There was a minor mistake in the part of continuous dialogues, you aren't supposed to put a period before the 2nd dialogue in a continuous dialogue. Aside from this, your grammar was perfect.

Character & Development: 4/10
As much as a story's plot is important without characters it will remain words. A character adds emotions and a vibe to the story. There are many characters, some are there for comedy or adding some angst into the plot. Some characters come and go and some stay throughout the story. That's what we call a story. The idea of the plot is amazing along with grammar but the execution part is falling apart. There were little to no emotions between both leads, you just stating that they fell in love but there was nothing I could say "yes, they fell in love". This story can be converted into a most beautiful romantic story but the way you are going with the story the love was dying between them. Saying "they love" doesn't make them fall in love, you need to use words and try to create the environment for it. Love is a strong emotion.

Total: 70.5/100

The story is good and has the potential to grow but the way you are executing is not impressive. You have knowledge on how to write so use it and try to improve the scenes and make things slower between the leads. The rush will lead you to nothing so think about it and replan their love again.