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The title of the story is eye-catching and suits the story well, yet the title can be something with a story-centred idea.
Cover: 2/4
The cover is well-designed and neat to look at, but it didn't catch one's attention perfectly.
Blurb: 3/5
The blurb is a quick piece, you should add a small summary of the story or the central base of the story for readers to have an idea about the story.
Writing style: 10/10
The writing style is pretty good, like a novel. It's just perfect.
Character Development: 5/5
There is a good character development, I mainly like the kind and respectful nature of Jin. The personality that characters have is a perfect mixture of originality and flaws.
Grammar: 10/10
The grammar used is so good, no objections.
Vocabulary: 10/10
The vocabulary you used is causal but with the good use of complex words. The vocabulary really fits the atmosphere of the saga.
Plotting: 11.5/12
The plotting is something I never read, it intriguing and fascinating. At first I thoughts it would be something that all mature book have, as you know it have a word "Spank". But it wasn't. I really like how you jotted down chapter which show their relationship building up.
Emotions: 8/10
Emotions were good, yet at some point the dialogues felt pressed and neutral in emotion at starting chapters.
Creativity: 6/10
I like how you divide the chapter in to sections, there wasn't many creative things, I would like to suggest you to make banners, maybe add some quotes related to the story or chapter.
Worth reading: 9/10
As I said I really like the character and the connection they bond in every chapter, the kind and understand words. I especially loved the explicit part!
Overall impression: 8/10
Overall, everything is good! You just need to improve in blurb, cover and creativity.
Total: 86/100
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