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Title:7/10 The title was definitely attention catching and unique but it didn't match the story . A title should be based on centric idea on books but here i didn't feel the same . It was really unique but also made the plot very hard to guess . Instead of making it unique I think you should focus on making it match the book . Despite all the things I liked how you gave a subtitle to it .
Cover: 9/10 The cover was well edited and neatly Designed . Even every small thing was made with too much focus . I really liked the details you have .The font you used was too fancy but it matched the cover . I really don't like the fancy covers much but I loved this one . But still I would advise you to go for some simplicity
Description: 3/10 I think this is the place where you should improve. The description was not like the description. It didn't show anything about the book . Readers mostly read the story after reading the description. It should be curiosity-creating. You should have shown some summary of the book in the description or the dialogues of curiosity. It just showed that there are two main characters jimin and Hye Jin , but it showed nothing about their personalities
First chapter: 8/10 The first chapter was good as it started with Hye Jin . It showed she is living with her brother Namjoon, but didn't clarify who the others were . It ended with she kicking a boy which was pretty easy to guess , to be jimin .
Character development: 3/10 I didn't see much development in the characters (as there were 7 chapters only . But as much as I have seen I can tell that it's gonna take some time
Character introduction: 8/10 Here too, I want you to make some improvements. No character was well introduced. There were many doubts about their personalities
Grammar and vocabulary:- 7/10 The grammar you used was pretty simple and understandable. There were not many mistakes in the vocabulary. overall it was pretty good . Without the use of any fancy word it looked good too
Plot: 6 /10 Well , honestly speaking I really like the idea of moonlings but due to less number of chapters i wasn't able to understand the plot fully . But as much I understood I really liked it
Writing style: 7 /10 The writing style was pretty common but was good. It was written like a novel I like the length of paragraph you made . It avoided all of the mis-reading because of its short length which I liked
Dialogue: 5 /10 I think you should work a little on your dialogues. I mean all the dialogues were good but they could be written in a more attractive way. But I must say your dialogues were too easy to understand.
Total:- 63/100
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