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His Mishti [Ash]

Book: His Mishti
Author: Itshikha
Reviewer: _Ash_es
Chapters read: 5

Cover: 5/5
It's a very bright cover. Simply using the picture of the main characters was a good idea. It's very eye-catching and they both look good together. It's perfect.

Title and blurb: 9/10
The title is cute. After getting to know the meaning I think it's really unique. The blurb was written neatly and professionally and it was captivating. It was a great idea to also list all the tropes included in the book below it.

Introduction: 18/20
It was a good beginning. The main girl was coming home and it was nice seeing how her family was preparing for her return. It was funny and not surprising though, that someone would get jealous at the way they were preparing for her. She was welcomed nicely, excluding her sister's behaviour and the fact that there were a few remarks about her dressing and all that. I think it's a calm intro and it gives off a nostalgic feeling.

Mechanics: 8/10
Great spelling, punctuation and paragraph spacing. Your grammar was actually very very good, it's just that a few sentences sounded weird and you were switching between tenses at intervals. But great job there.

Plot: 4/5
I really like the way the story is progressing. I didn't read past chapter 5, but so far, I have to say, it's an unexpectedly thrilling story. Most of the scenes are tense and some are really emotional. The tone was not what I braced myself for when I began to read. And from what I've read so far, I think the romance is going to be really good.

Originality: 7/10
It has a nice plot, relatable characters, and I think your ideas are really creative.

Writing style: 17/20
For someone whose first language isn't English, your writing is really impressive.  Your descriptions are nice and your expression of emotion is commendable. There were things I found though. You described someone as rude and insolent. Don't they have almost the same meaning? Also there was one sentence in chapter two: ‘Since I'm close to everyone but not with her, I don't know why she doesn't like me.' It sounds weird. I think you mean, ….but not her, I don't know… One more thing, try to lessen your dialogue tags. If it's two people talking, there's no need for them. And sometimes the readers know when a particular person is talking, so it wouldn't be needed at that time as well.

Enjoyment: 15/20
One of my favourite parts was when the main male character was torturing that innocent man and she girl yelled to stop the man from killing him. So far, it's been an interesting read.

Total: 83/100

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