Chpater oen prouloge [does this person even read WarriorS? And learn how to write!!!]
The cats gathered around a pool. They all looked into it eagerly. A dark shape appeared on the surface. A blue she cat looked up. Her eyes were bright. [Bluestar is a blue-grey, not just blue!]
"There is a prophecy!" She said. "out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly." [Hollyleaf isn't born yet, this is going in circles. And this is like the worst prophecy ever]
"Its about StarKit!" A white tom said. "Shes going to save the forest," He looked at a gold tom by BlueStar. "she has powers nobody dreamed of." Said the gold tom. "Should we tell JayFeather?" He asked. "Yes." Said BlueStar. "he needs to know." [again with the two words and the paragraphs are all messed up]
She walked away from the pool to tell JayFeather about the prophcy. [this is the worst]
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