Candy Book Review 2022[CLOSED]

May#1 The Gunner and the Florist

Hey candies,
How are y'all doing...my next review is going to be on "The Gunner and the Florist" by CrystalCallistral
So buckle your seatbelts mates, we're going on a wild train ride.

Plot development:
So where should I start...umm...this book is totally Wicked!
Ahh...I love your descriptions and I can't help but envision it like a movie in my head.
Throughout this book, I imagined the characters with a strict British accent...I love the British accent tho, I watch a lot of movies and I couldn't help but envision the setting.
While reading this book, I continually thought of "After", "After we fell" etc and just imagined Hardin's accent.

I love the way you managed the opinion and POVs of the two major protagonists. The plot was not fast or slow paced, it was just alright. I'm asking you earnestly to please complete it, as I would love to see how far Lennox and Ren's relationship last.
The fact that you accurately described the dystopian, post apocalyptic London is outstanding...you're a brilliant writer, I must say. I wasn't bored once while reading this book. You portrayed the effects of war on individuals, the environment and humanity in general. War and rage makes us monsters and devolves humanity. The fact that the war is mindless and uncalled for adds more color to the story and makes readers feel as though they were hanging from the railings of a storey building.
Your choice of words/diction isn't complex, and is really easy to comprehend.

Throughout this book, I couldn't help but say "dammmn Crystal really put her all".
I can't wait to see the more suspense, romance and action you're going to put your readers through.
Ahhh if only books were movies.
Keep it up mate!
It's a 8/10

Character development:
The characters are absolutely outstanding, their personalities actually flow with their descriptions.
I feel sorry for Lennox tho, many people lack adequate parental love and care which is very essential.
I feel sorry for Ren also, it's really painful to lose a loved one. I actually thinks he's soft towards Lennox. You literally left a cliffhanger by stopping at chapter 12. I would love to know if Ren actually executed his plan.
I'm also curious as to why Ren became a trans and why he dislikes the female gender. I do trust you have his back story figured out.

I like Trixcia and her demeanor, I admire Mistan...I think Wade is a jerk.
You did mention that he was a normal person before the war, hmm that goes to show that war really changes people. Emily is too dependent, I actually know people like her. Her character saddens me though.
Chase is cute and a nice addition to the story.
In general, the characters are 8/10.

Book cover:
Ahhh the book cover is perfect for the story. It honestly says a lot about the story and fits the central theme. At the first glance, as a reader I knew it's a bxb book. You need to show me your cover artist for real.
It's a 9/10

Grammatical erorrs:
Like I said earlier, you're a brilliant writer. And I'm not just saying it for saying sake, I'm saying it cause it's actually true.
You did well with your punctuations, there are some chapters that didn't even have errors.
Though at a point I noticed that you overused the commas, but that didn't disrupt the overall flow of the book.
Though there's always room for improvements.
The corrections to errors are in bold and additional explanation given in brackets.
If you get confused at any point do not hesitate to let me know.
Here we go

Chapter 1:

He heard the click clack of her heels as Emily Kendrick turned to look at her eldest son (not "oldest son")

The echoes of his brutal dance lessons lingered, from when the family was still part of the high class (this fits better)

Lennox breathed them in gladly, swiping off few books from his battered wooden desk to work in solemn peace (not "wood")

Only more so that he hadn't talked to his father for two whole years

Chapter 2:

Ren watched their bodies hit the ground with a thud, that he could only imagine he heard (punctuation)

He opted for a more formal and professional approach, and redressed (there's meant to be a comma)

After all, Mitsan was the one who had saved him eight years ago (no need for a comma after "him")

It was only a little way away from the main entrance (not "ways")

I can nurse my own injuries, without this bastard's help.
(It would make more sense with a comma after injuries and "this" instead of "that bastard" cause Ren was just standing beside her, he wasn't far off so it would make more sense using "this")

Chapter 3:

Your secret is safe with me, for now. (There's meant to be a comma not full stop)

Deep into the enemy's territory and under the cover of darkness
(This fits better)

Chapter 4:

Subconsciously he found his fist clenching, and Chase who was stood next to him, gave him a puzzled look (please, take note of the punctuations)

Lennox put on a brave face and walked to the epicenter (you repeated "the" twice)

Chapter 5:

Before Ten could journey to the expansive spread, Abyss, a younger syndicate member interrupted him. (No need for a comma after "member")

Hey handsome, do you want to share a drink with me?, Maybe discuss a partnership?
("Do" not "Did")

These rich, sumptuous fools. (I think "these" fits better that "the")

Chapter 6:

Lily of the valley to be exact, and it soothed his soul (take note of the punctuation, there's no need to put a comma after "valley")

Lennox bit his lip, trying to think of a solution. (This fits better)

Chapter 7:

Lennox thought, and the Euros that were ensnared in his fits became held in an even tighter grip than before (not "what")

Lennox insisted, and proceeded to shove Ren off the roof of The Happenstance (not "of")

Chapter 8:

Some time before, the signal to choose the target has been sent as well

Chapter 9:

Lennox grimaced when he discovered his so called saviour was none other that his captor, Ren ("he" not "his")

Chapter 11:

In the background, Mitsan was watching with an amused expression on his face (this fits better)

Ren would never join the league that murdered his elder sister, Sarlyn.

General Review:
I absolutely recommend this book to lovers of LGBT, action, Britain and romance genres.
I also want to ask you to complete the book, cause I'm completely hooked as it has my rapt attention.
Overall rating: 8/10

Have a nice day y'all
XOXO,
Candy lover
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