AUTHOR: ShadesInArt
Critique Steward: cyraxxi
[Title]
For me kasi eh,cliché talaga yung title. Marami na rin kasing stories na may academy yung title,then nagtataka ako bakit pala luciell academy yung naisipan mong title? yes,nasa academy talaga yung setting pero pwede naman atang pamagatan ng iba ang story mo.
[Cover]
Bagay naman yung cover sa story mo base sa aking nabasa kaya no worries.
[Description/Summary]
Wow ang ganda ng description mo,it really suits the story the thrills and chills are there. Habang binabasa ko siya nagsitayuan yung balahibo ko. And it's really attractive to the readers.
[Characterization]
The Characters are really in place from the robotic demon teacher's to the main characters. Ang galing ng pagka characterize mo nakakahanga.
[Cleanliness]
May Isa lang problem dito yun yung may back story si Gab sana in italic yun kesa sa normal na style ng font, punctuation marks are in place even the grammars and sentence structures are correct.
[Dialogue and Narrations]
The dialogue and narrations are still in good use,it has that certain impact to the readers na ma fefeel din nila yung emotions ng characters.
[Plot,Twist and Uniqueness]
Ask ko lang. Are you inspired by another author? Kasi parang pareho yung plot and twist sa story na yun eh well except nga sa robotic voice na nag control sa mga students and about dun sa killing part well may killing part din naman yung story na parang kapareho ng plot at twist sa story mo except sa way na pag kill ng mga students. I won't say na unique yung plot and twist kasi meron talagang maraming kapareho,all in all hindi naman cliché yung story.
Note:
Sorry if I hurt your feelings sa hurtful words kung meron man.
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