The Stories By: paynapolIAM
Critizicer: chingchongpajibar
Title: "The stories" (in which you did not want to continue) seems intriguing and kind of fun for me. Pero no'ng nabasa ko na, it really confused me and to be honest, I prefer you do it as oneshots.
Cover: Since, I think, for fun lang naman ang book, I did not pay much attention to it, pero okay naman
Description/Summary: Okay naman, you gave cautions and said honestly na makakapanggulo nga ito sa isip ng mga magbabasa, and I thank you for that.
Prologue/Blurb: I'm the type na hindi masyadong nagbabasa ng prologues but as far as I have read in your prologue, I don't think it's necessary to put many dots, like dots in line. Pero it's still your choice.
Characterization: And because your characters changes each part of the book, I can't really say much kasi then I have to say it generally which will be hard kasi nga, pa-iba-iba ka ng character.
Cleanliness: Personally, I consider a book clean, kapag tama lang ang counts ng punctation marks at mga dots and dashes
.Dialogue and Narrations: I have seen words that aren't punctuated correctly and sometimes aren't spelt right.Things like; yung, diba, non, etc. Those should be 'yong (iyong) , 'di ba (hindi ba), no'n (noon). Tapos, I've learnt one thing from my co-Wattsteward, na kapag ang isang word ay nagtatapos sa vowel (a, e, i, o, u) the next word should start with 'r'. (such as, "dapat" "dito" and things like that) pero kung hindi naman nag-e-end sa vowel, it should come off as it already is.
Plot, Twist, Uniqueness: For the second time, dahil nga nag-iiba-iba, I can't really criticize your plot pero if I have to say how you pick your plots, it would be amazing. Just look at how your mind works and it really shows how imaginative and creative you are when it comes to creating things.
Side note ✎you have such an amazing talent and i appreciate your hard work so so much. i just think you could make it possible to creat oneshots at hindi lang pinagsama-sama sa isang libro lang. first off, it would sound not so neat kasi pabago-bago (pero you warned people naman so i think it's fine). i hope you would keep doing what you love, and may god bless you! ❤️
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