FANTASY RESULTS

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Genre: FANTASY

Judge: ElleJennifer18

ENTRY 1 - JLN_STRYS 
Dying in a Dream

WRITING STYLE: 15/20

PLOT: 17/20

FLOW: 20/25

*TOTAL POINTS:  82/100

*CRITIQUE:

Dying in a dream. This is just an honest review ha so sana hindi ka magalit or what. Okay?

Mabilis ang kwento, mabilis ang lahat ng pangyagari, aamimin kong medyo na-bored ako kasi predictable na yung next scene eh also the dialogues of the main characters, medyo nakulangan pa ako lalo na sa emosyon at sa part na namaalam si Belle.
Add some ingredients and add more colors into it para ma-feel ng mambabasa na it's a fantasy story.

Suggestion, you can take it or leave it. Minimize using "HAHAHAHAH" it would be better if isusulat mo talaga siya na natawa ka or ang reaction mo sa tawa (this was an advise also to me before). In addition, kung ang last sentence mo ay period dapat automatic na 'yan na capital letter ang kasunod and the right use of the punctuations po.

There's still a missing piece to the story but I know that you can find it and complete it.

Let your words be your mouth to express what you think and feel. Keep writing and be safe.

Loveloootsss... Mwaah!

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ENTRY 2 - Jcleff
  ● Into the Secrets of the Wand

WRITING STYLE: 19/20

PLOT: 19/20

FLOW: 24/25

*TOTAL POINTS:  85/100

*CRITIQUE:

Into the Secrets of the Wand. Nagustuhan ko ang flow ng kwento, hindi boring at hindi masyadong kumplikado, hindi rin gaanong ka-cliche ang kwento dahil may bagong recipe na idinagdag.
Kakaiba siya dahil sa unang kabanata pa lang ay mapapatawa ka na, may sense of humor ang nakapaloob sa kwento. 

Maayos ang pagkakasulat at halos wala akong makitang pagkakamali.

Hindi ko na ito masyadong pahahabain pa. Ipagpapatuloy ko ang pagbabasa hanggang sa katapusan dahil gusto kong malaman kung sino ang makakatuluyan ni Anactoria at kung ano ang mangyayari sa susunod pang mga kabanata.

Loveloootss... Mwaaah!

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ENTRY 3 - DaveElas21 
Ms. Nobody's Revenge

WRITING STYLE: 17/20

PLOT: 17/20

FLOW: 22/25

*TOTAL POINTS: 87/100

*CRITIQUE:

Ms. Nobody's Revenge. Kwento na base sa totoong pangyayari at hinaluaan ng pantasya, naiintindihan ko ang mga pangyayari sa buhay ni Mary ngunit medyo may kabilisan lang talaga ang takbo ng kwento. As I've mentioned before that your story is one of a kind but the plot is kinda cliche, try adding some excitements or more colors into it.

Moving forward with the technicalities. First, misspelled words but no worries madali lang naman siyang mai-edit para maayos at bilang isang manunulat din ay naiintindihan ko ang part na 'yan. Second, the most important na dapat malaman ay ang tamang pag gamit ng punctuations po, napansin ko kasi na sa bawat hulihan ng sentence ay comma ang iyong nailalagay o naisusulat, sa kada hulihan ng sentence ay dapat na tuldok ang gagamitin. Maaari ka naman pong magsaliksik para mas maunawaan mo po ang nais kong ipahayag.

Every work is masterpiece. Your work is a piece of art.
You are great and one day you'll be greater than today.
Continue your writing journey po Author.

P.S: please don't hate me about my critiques to your story. Loveloootsss. Mwaaah!

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ENTRY 4 - Arisalatte
The Golden Rule of Arkania

WRITING STYLE: 18/20

PLOT: 18/20

FLOW: 23/25

*TOTAL POINTS: 90/100

* OVERALL CRITIQUE:

The Golden Rule of Arkania. Masasabi mo talagang pinaghandaan, pinag-isipan at pina-ganda ang kwento. Nagkamali ako sa unang basa ko ng story description, akala ko ay isang common story na naman ito. Maayos ang flow ng kwento, halos wala nga akong makitang technical errors, well choice of words too.

Sa katunayan nga ay nabitin ako, gusto kong malaman pa kung ano ang susunod na mangyayari sa buhay ni Luna.

Keep writing Author. I'll be waiting for your next update.

Loveloootsss!

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ENTRY 5 - maifaye0025
Universe Ruled by the Stars

WRITING STYLE: 19/20

PLOT: 20/20

FLOW: 24/25

*TOTAL POINTS: 95 /100

*CRITIQUE:

Universe Ruled by the Stars.
If you love astronomy? Then, you'll surely love the story.

Maganda ang kwento, walang halong biro. Kakaiba siya eh lalo na yung mga inventory words ni Author, yung mga pandagdag kaalaman tungkol sa kalawakan. Sa flow naman ay hindi ka malilito dahil maayos at malinis ang pagkakabahagi at pagkakasulat.

Lastly, may napansin akong kakaunting error lang naman na madaling maayos, specifically yung sa spacing.
That's it.

Dear Author,

Your work is amazing and a great masterpiece. 
I'll surely read it until the end. Keep writing!

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CONGRATULATIONS! maifaye0025 . You're one of the Top 8!

 You're one of the Top 8!

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