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Review: The cover photo is fine, but the title and author are way too small and disappear into it, especially the author name. The blurb is concise, but more like a general product description than a convincing advert to get readers in the door. There's a little humour in the piece, but I'd not call this a humorous memoir overall. The inclusion of the different roles in a band was quite enlightening and some of the descriptions of the awful rehearsal rooms quite well done description-wise. Since this is real life and doesn't seem to be told using many fiction elements, "plot" is a hard one to judge, as is "character development". It all feels scattershot and without a clear throughline other than memory associations. That is, it reads like a random-ish collection of scenes and comments that don't exactly stay with anyone "character" long enough to get to know them, or one scene long enough to fully appreciate what has been there was really like. Unfortunately, there are also a number of typos and incorrect punctuation throughout, which makes it look as if the text hasn't been proofread/ edited and brings down the "grammar" score.
Review: Nice, inviting cover with a good graphic and pica that's easy to read. The blurb, while a little bit choppy in phrasing, is humorous and gives a concise idea about the plot and genre. The story is somewhere between the comedy of Shrek and the seriousness of The Hunchback of Notre Dame, both of which will be known to many readers. Unfortunately, there are too many parallels to Shrek at the start and one can't help superimposing those characters onto the ones in the story. The English used is quite plain at the beginning. Although this does at times help with the comedy, there are not enough strong verbs and descriptions used for us to properly visualise the setting/characters (enter Shrek again). This changes as the story progress and chapter 4 are doing quite well and the flow and word choices are greatly improved.
Review: The cover and font used are not the best, nor is the plain title. It's hard to imagine what they both represent. (You might like to check out the Unsplash website for a huge selection of cool, free photos, and then Canva to do some free photoshopping.) The blurb contains a number of grammar/phrasing errors and is a little difficult to understand towards the end. The narrative voice (Alex' voice) is quite funny in parts, but also somewhat confusing and repetitious. She isn't telling us enough for us to be able to follow why things are happening or why, especially at the camp, there is so much time spent in the rooms with the two characters irritating each other and so few 'monitored' activities. Unfortunately, there is a very little setting description or details of the world, which make it hard to visualise where all this is happening. It's a fun idea but needs more meat on its bones to reach its potential.
Review: The cover is plain and not framed as well as it could be. The backpack on the right is almost not visible and can be easily thought a design mistake. The language of the blurb is stiff and awkwardly phrased in parts. It also tells too much of the story straight out, instead of hinting at it. The English in the story is good in general, but there are phrasing errors and minor grammar mistakes/misspellings throughout. In the first five chapters, there is hardly any setting description. Although the characters are supposedly trekking through beautiful wilderness and then land in an exciting city, nothing much beyond their conversation is given. That makes the story feel as if it is happening in a vacuum and we get no feeling of the place. The characters, however, were drawn quite clearly and it was easy to feel their different personalities.
Review:- I loved the start of the book. I was laughing the whole time. The flow and plot was very nice. The grammar and vocabulary were in place. The title can be something more catchy and funny according to the plot. Overall I was more than impressed. Great work, keep going!
Review:- I feel no connection between the cover and the plot, you need to work on that. I would suggest you make the blurb more catchy. The vocabulary was in place but you need to work on the writing style, you chose humor as your genre but I find nothing humor at times. The long paragraphs sound boring. If you want to write it in a long paragraph way then you need to make it interesting. Work on the above-mentioned things and you'll be fine. Great work, keep going!
Review:- I would suggest you to change the cover and title as it's all about humor so you can put something humorous. You can write some ten quotes in one chapter so that it doesn't seem empty and boring, also, fun can be maintained without breaking. Well, for character development the jokes and humor was taken to next level so it was pretty good. Blurb can be more catchy but the present one is fine too. Great work, keep going!
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