INK AND INSIGHTS

The Art And The Artist | Hyunin

We're finally at the sixth and last sample review for this book: The Art And The Artist | Hyunin by riddle-princess. After this review, I will finally get to all the fanfics you guys submitted through the form. I look forward to reading all the wonderful submissions!

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1. Title of the story:

The Art And The Artist.

The title is simple but instantly conveys that this story is about a painter and his muse. I am such a sucker for these types of stories that I have written two fics on the same trope of a painter and a muse (three if we are counting that one fic that I have deleted). 

2. Description of the story:

I love the quote you have in the book description: "I always wondered, how would you look like when you smile so I imagined you with one."

As it is a ship fic for one of the fastest-growing fandoms on Wattpad, I think we can rule out the effectiveness of a description in this case. The logline you have given about Hyunjin being the painter and Jeongin his masterpiece is enough to target the right audience.

3. Character Dynamics:

I will only discuss the main characters here because even though you do have side characters, they are not that much in focus.

Jeongin - I kinda get the feeling that Jeongin is your favorite character to write about. There's just something in the way you write him that gives off the feeling that you as an author are very fond of him. I noticed that you conveyed that he had a rough past, especially his childhood due to his parents in the earlier chapters. The way you have developed his character as a result of that neglect and blame shows in how he keeps to himself is hesitant to form new friendships, and is very reserved. We see his past peek through his actions and I want to give you bonus points for keeping his character consistent.

Hyunjin - I think we see Hyunjin more in the light of Jeongin's character. That means even though you have given him his POVs fairly, it's just always about him and Jeongin. From Jeongin's standpoint, we see other things such as his life before meeting Hyunjin and his job, etc but from Hyunjin's standpoint, all we can see is Jeongin. You might disagree as the author here or maybe you have a specific reason for doing that but I would like it more if we get to see Hyunjin's life aside from Jeongin too. I will give you a few questions to think about. What was his past like? Why does he feel the need to help Jeongin aside from just the reason of being attracted to him? What made him get connected to Jeongin in the first place? Try to answer these questions as Hyunjin and maybe you will get more material to flesh out his character. Thinking about his personal motivations is a good start to give his character more depth.

4. Character Development:

The story is not complete yet and I expect to see greater character development by the end. However, we do see Jeongin start to open up and get interested in life after meeting Hyunjin. So I would say that Hyunjin acts as a positive influencer in his character development. I am also expecting to see what influence Jeongin has on him in the upcoming chapters. 

Whenever two people are in a relationship, both of them have a distinct impact on the other. So showing what impact they have and how it changes or develops the character is very important when you are writing a ship fic that is only focusing on two characters and their relationship.

5. Dialogue and Delivery:

I like the way your characters interact with each other. The dialogue is not very wordy or heavy on the eyes and it is very appropriate for people of their age group. In terms of the delivery, I felt the scenes were a bit choppy and short towards the beginning of the story but now you have gotten the hang of it and every chapter connects seamlessly with the previous one. I am sure if you ever get the time to rewrite, the first few chapters will turn out much better as your writing has improved over time.

6. Character Chemistry:

Jeongin and Hyunjin have that sparks fly chemistry between them. They are both so cute and precious and I love the way you have slowly built that connection between them by adding shared moments and feelings. The visit to the library, the trip to the beach, and the time Hyunjin showed his paintings, all add a warm feeling to the budding relationship between them. 

7. Plot and Story Themes:

Okay, so I don't normally read K-pop fanfics. I think I only read a few on Jungkook and Taehyung but that too was a phase that died out very soon. But for your story, I am reading without the whole context of them being idols or part of a K-pop group. It's easier for me this way to imagine them as just two human beings who met and then connected.

Of course, I am not saying that people shouldn't write about K-pop, you do what you think is best. But I love the way you kept the story so that readers who are not part of the fandom can connect with it too. I just today found out that Jeongin and Hyunjin are part of the Stray Kids group (I just never looked them up on Google before). So I appreciate that you have written them as just normal people without involving the glitz and glamor of the Idol world.

8. Writing Style:

I like your writing style as it is simple, descriptive, emotionally connecting, and easy to comprehend. I can see the improvement in the later chapters as compared to when I first read the story and that's obviously a good thing as it shows you are incorporating more improvement into your writing. I love the way you describe settings and the way you incorporate the little details in how Hyunjin views Jeongin as art. One chapter I liked particularly was when their friends' group had gone out for a picnic and we got to read a very heartwarming scene between Jeongin and Hyunjin. 

9. Areas of Improvement:

I think I mentioned in the character dynamics what I felt was missing from Hyunjin's character so I won't elaborate more here. Aside from this, I think your story is great and I enjoyed reading it. I haven't reviewed your cover but I think it would be great if you make the title more readable by changing the font or the color so that it shows well over the background image.

10. My Personal Opinion or Ideas:

As always, I have lots of songs to recommend for this cute couple. All of these are beautiful and fit the story.

Song Recommendations:

There's No Way by Lauv ft. Julia Michaels for Jeongin and Hyunjin.

Broken by Anson Seabra for Jeongin.

Eyes Off You by PRETTYMUCH for the way Hyunjin admires Jeongin.

Could You Love Me While I Hate Myself by Zeph. If you listen to this song, you will see how much it resonates with Jeongin's character.

Still Learning by Halsey for Jeongin.

11. Concluding Remarks:

I have said all I wanted to say earlier so just summing everything up here. I had a great time reading your story and I look forward to reading more as soon as you update. Of course, I will always have a lot to say and you will get spammed by my comments on each chapter (that's a habit I can't get rid of). So far, you have done a great job with your characters so keep it up and I wish you all the best.

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riddle-princess I hope you found the review helpful. I really wanted to do a review for your story because it was the first Stray Kids fic I have read and I loved the way you focused on the character dynamics. I will be able to make the review process better if you fill out a feedback form on how you found this review so far, it will only take a few minutes.

Link to the form that I'll also add in the comments section: https://forms.gle/AfUdLCWXkEtR4JyU6

Have a lovely day and stay blessed. And of course, it's always awesome to meet Wattpad writers irl by accident. I am so glad I met you and got to read your stories.