📕Requester: AteLollyPopz
📕Title: Make Him Fall
📕Critic Mentor: Lureylie_new➡️Ang iyong mababasa ay pawang opinyon lamang na may pinagbasehan.
➡️Nawa'y makatulong ako upang mas mahasa mo ang iyong kakayahan.
➡️1-5 chapters lang ang pinagbasehan ko ng critique na ito. Wag sanang dibdibin ng sobra.
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💥Book Cover:
✔ The cover was very nice. The image really captured the situation of Jackie wanting Jazzen. Ramdam ko ang salitang WANTING YOUR LOVE sa cover mo at effective nitong binigyan ng hustisya ang kwento ni Jackie. Hurrray! 🙌🙌
✔ Fonts was simple yet appealing. Simplicity is always attactive kaya YES na YES ako sa title fonts.
🔰 Ang tanging napansin ko lang ay ang kulay sa background, why gray? Like what I said sa mga teen fiction books na nabasa ko na, YA and TF stories must be in vibrant colors cuz it represent transistion from teens to adulthood pero acceptable na 'to.
Overall, positive ang dating sa akin ng cover kaya nakuha mo ang atensyon ko. Hurray! 😄😄😄
💥Title:
🔼 MAKE HIM FALL
It sounded like an objective of the protagonist. Kung titingnan ang title makikita na kaagad ng mga mambabasa ang daloy o takbo ng kwento.🔼 And also, gasgas na rin ang title for me since marami na akong nakita na ganyan ang title. Now, try to simplify this, subukan mo lang na isa imbes tatlo. Let's see how creative you are. 😉😯
💥Opening:
~ Lets have your blurb.
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