PoeticRin , your rate by emmiepooh2 is ready.
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Since you are our first poem, we'll explain how it works:
Each of your 10 poems you chose to be judged will be in here given a certain amount of score each. You will also get details to help in every one of the sections, when needed. I'm very excited to judge your poetry!
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Vocabulary: 5/5
Veins .5+
You get the whole half of a point here because of the vocabulary in the poem. The words were not hard to understand and it made the poem make more sense.
Unrequited .5+
I would just have to say that your vocabulary was phenomenal in this piece.
Depart .5+
The vocabulary made the piece by showing the emotion through word choice.
Let's Make Love .5+
Walk in the Beach .5+
Memories .5+
Mirror Tells no Lies .5+
Mean to be .5+
Understand? .5+
Three words .5+
Tone/flow: 14/15
Veins 1.0+ (-.5)
I give this a 1.0 instead of a 1.5 because it could use some more story in it. Like, don't be afraid to pour your heart out in it and get 12+ lines. Only having the 4 lines do affect the flow because it's like not finishing a book. It feels like it is incomplete.
Unrequited 1.5+
The flow was quite spectacular and set the tone 100% for that piece.
Depart 1.5+
Let's Make Love 1.5+
Walk in the Beach 1.5+
Memories 1.5+
Mirror Tell no Lies 1.0+ (-.5)
In reading this, it didn't make complete sense. I believe if you make it a longer poem it can be.
Mean to be 1.5+
Understand? 1.5+
Three Words 1.5+
Emotion: 25/25
Veins: 2.5+
You did a spectacular job displaying your emotion in the four lines you provided and it was high key relatable.
Unrequited: 2.5+
You did a spectacular job with this piece and made the emotions raw. That's what's the best part of poems.
Depart: 2.5+
I could relate so much to this piece.
Let's Make Love 2.5+
The poem made me feel as if it was truly something that was said to another person due to the chemistry in the piece.
Walk in the Beach 2.5+
The raw love was so perfectly expressed!!
Memories 2.5+
It tells a rather sad truth to the world in such a good manner.
Mirror Tells no Lies 2.5+
Though it doesn't make complete sense, I would have to say, your poetry always shows so much emotion and this one displays a lot of it.
Mean to be 2.5+
This does relate to so many questions I know a lot of people want to ask. It hits so close to home for anyone and everyone.
Understand? 2.5+
This has to be my favorite piece now! The raw emotions showed exactly how I feel.
Three Words 2.5+
I balled my eyes out, Rin. I mean it!!! This is so flipping true!!!
Poetry Techniques: 9.5/10
Veins: 1.0+
I loved how you used AAAA instead of ABAB or ABCD. I say that because it's the hardest thing to do, in poetry. At least it's the hardest thing I have done in my opinion. Also, its preferred for poetics, too!
Unrequited: 1.0+
I love how you change the way you wrote this one.
Depart: 1.0+
I love how you do various lengths for your poems.
Let's Make Love 1.0+
The passion was quite strong in this piece.
Walk in the Beach 1.0+
I love how it flowed like a butterfly throughout the piece.
Memories: 1.0+
I love how you truly just structured it.
Mirror Tells no Lies .5+ (-.5)
Due to it not making complete sense, I did take a point off. This doesn't seem like a well finished poem but more so an outline for it.
Mean to be 1.0+
I just truly love how you structured this poem, it got my heart aching from past experiences and for you!
Understand? 1.0+
The structure is just spectacular!!!
Three Words: 1.0+
I love the way it is structured and the technique you used.
Originality: 25/25
Veins 2.5+
Unrequited: 2.5+
Depart: 2.5+
Let's Make Love 2.5+
Walk in the Beach 2.5+
Memories 2.5+
Mirror Tells no Lies 2.5+
Mean to be 2.5+
Understand? 2.5+
Three Words 2.5+
Grammar: 19.70/20
Veins 2.0+
Unrequited: 2.0+
Depart 1.8+ (-.20)
Due to two grammatical errors you lost .2 points here. For line two, it should be 'is' and for line 4, it should be 'grow.'
Let's Make Love 2.0+
Walk in the Beach 2.0+
Memories 2.0+
Mirror Tells no Lies 2.0+
Mean to be 1.9+ (-.10)
You forgot the 't' in the title. Otherwise, it is good.
Understand? 2.0+
Total: 98.2/100
Overall thoughts:
Are you thinking about publishing this poem book? I recommend that you should!!! Keep up with the writing.
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XOXO
Emily
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