REVIEWED BY: DisneyTsumTsum2
Author: litViana
CHAPTERS READ: 7
|| C O V E R ||
I'm not really sure what I think about it. Not that I don't like it, but it doesn't draw my attention. It could be worse, but it could be better. (Then again, I'm a bit picky with covers.)
|| T I T L E ||
I don't completely get it yet. Maybe it's because you aren't far enough into the story yet though. There was also a "~" at the end of the title that I didn't particularly like or understand.
However, it is definitely unique, and I'm really happy it's not something like "The Mafia's daughter," (Sorry, I'm terrible at coming up with titles) or something like that. While it sometimes does draw people to read the book, it is terribly cliche and overused. (I was actually curious how many people named their book that, so I searched it up on Wattpad... it was a lot of people.)
|| B L U R B ||
I did like your blurb. I see a lot of blurbs that either have nothing in them, over explain their story, or are just semi- pointless. Yours perfectly described your book in a few sentences, even ending with a small hook that made you want to read more.
Your tags are all pretty appropriate, except for maybe #stephenjames, I think that one doesn't really need to be there.
Great job!
(On an unrelated note, about the note in your blurb, the genre of your book could be either action or romance. So far, it does look like it's going to be more of a romance though.)
|| P L O T ||
The action starts pretty early in, which is good. Your plot itself is also developing fairly fast. I like how your book, while based on the mafia cliche, is also unique in it's own way. At first, I thought it would be like all mafia books, but it surprised me. In a good way.
As you keep writing, make sure you keep adding your own spin and twist to things, so it doesn't become a cliche.
|| C H A R A C T E R S ||
Your characters were well developed. They have personalities and feelings, (More then I can say for some Wattpad books I've read honestly.) and don't do extremely unreasonable and utterly stupid things. They are all, (well the ones intended to be anyways,) likable. I look forwards to seeing their growth throughout your story.
|| T I P ||
If you are going to make an aesthetic chapter every time you introduce a character, I would just make one chapter with aesthetics for all of the main characters.
But I love your aesthetics, they look great!
|| O V E R A L L ||
I have to say, Mafia books aren't usually my cup of tea, but yours was enjoyable to read. It has a lot of potential in it, and I would like to see where the story will go.
Amazing job, and keep up the good work!
|| S H O R T R U B R I C ||
3/5 ~ Title
4/5 ~ Blurb
5/5 ~ Writing Style
8/10 ~ Grammar
10/10 ~ Flow
10/10 ~ Description
8/10 ~ Character
9/10 ~ Enjoyment
16/20 ~ Plot
8/10 ~ Cover & Graphics
4/5 ~ Originality & Creativity
85/100
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