REVIEWED BY: DisneyTsumTsum2
AUTHOR: i-freaking-lo_ove-me
CHAPTERS READ: 12
|| C O V E R & T I T L E ||
Your cover is ok, and your title is good. One thing I would recommend is giving your chapters names, because it makes things interesting. You don't have to if you don't want to though. (On a completely unrelated and semi-unprofessional note, your gifs were hilarious. I loved the one in chapter one. :D)
|| C H A R A C T E R S ||
I've got to say, I love your name choices! They are all very creative. I can't quite say I've never seen the names Caelum or Emery before, but I certainly don't see them often! Daesyn is also a beautiful name.
As for your actual character 's personalities, I like how Caelum wasn't a 'bad boy' in the typical sense. It wasn't a cliche story, which was awesome. (He's my favorite character by the way. :D He just kind of reminds me of myself. And although he is kind of... moody, he doesn't come across as extremely arrogant or anything in your writing.)
I would have liked to see maybe a little bit more character evolution. I'm pretty sure it's because I haven't read far enough in your story yet, but I really wanted to see your characters grow as people.
|| G R A M M A R ||
No complaints here so far! I'll comment with a 🖊 if I find something though. I don't think I'll really find anything though. Your grammar was good.
|| D E S C R I P T I O N ||
I originally was going to say that you could have added more description, but I read a few more chapters and thought it was fine. When you described places like Caelum's room, I had a clear visual in my mind of the setting. Amazing job!
|| O V E R A L L ||
Of all the books I've reviewed for this club, and in general, this was one of my favorites. It had a nice humor aspect to it, and good grammar. (Thank you for the good grammar. It helped the flow of the story, and also made reading it more enjoyable. :D)
Overall, great job, and I look forwards to seeing where this story is heading.
|| S H O R T R U B R I C ||
8/10 - Cover
5/5 - Title
4/5 - Blurb
5/5 - Writing Style
10/10 - Grammar
10/10 - Flow
10/10 - Description
9/10 - Character
10/10 - Enjoyment
5/5 - Originality
19/20 - Plot
95/100
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