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Only Ishqbaaaz, Kuch Rang Pyaar Ke Aise Bhi, Swasan and Manan...
Title: The title is intriguing since we don't read science fiction in IB fan fics. It intrigued me and since I'm very very choosy, that's saying something. So I like the title.
Cover: The cover is way too flashy for my liking. Try opting for simple covers. I feel that simplicity is beauty.
Description: The description is fine except there are a lot of punctuation mistakes–which we will get to later on–and a few things that I found quite off.
➸ Error One: A world where roads are not there sounds weird. Change that sentence into a world where roads don't exist. After all, creativity we'd presentation matters a lot too.
➸Error Two: Cherry on top is a metaphor used when something small yet nice happens. And currently Anika is not in the beat position do falling in love isn't a good thing but a bad one instead.
Punctuation: As a reader, I feel that punctuation is the most important thing that is there in a story. I swear I can read a crap plot line if the punctuation marks are correct along with good description.
➸ Capitalization: Capitalize only when the sentence begins or when using proper noun. Never capitalize in the middle of the sentence.
➸ Spacing: Don't give space before adding a punctuation. When a sentence finishes, add a full stop without adding spacing. The same applies for comma, semi colon and inverted commas. You have to add the spacing like I did.
Example: "Come here, girl." My mum coos, opening her arms.
➸ Apostrophe [']: Apostrophe is used when showing possession or abbreviating words like “it is” or “would have”. So in the description you wrote “car's fly” but there's no need for possession or abbreviating. It's supposed to be plural, thus you need to remove the apostrophe.
Plot: The plot is different and refreshing since its a sci-fi love story. I can't say much about it since the story is still in its initial stage.
Overall: This story is in dire need of editing. Complete the book first while keeping these points in mind and when you finish it, go back and edit everything.
