My Songs

The Unknown

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So, lately I have been having writers' block, and I thought of this really awesome chorus, and I started to write the rest if the song. I was not successful whatsoever, so I just made the parts I had written into a completely different song. It just wasn't making sense and wasn't going along with he chorus I created. So I started writing something that made more sense, but I still feel like it doesn't make sense at all. So I really don't think its that good. I just want the advice from you all, and I want your feedback, so I know if it actually doesn't make sense, or if I'm just being stressed for nothing lol. But here it is:

Verse 1
I wandered off
To the unknown
Not knowing to whom
Or where to go
I left your presence
For my confusion
But you're an essence
Of pure illusion
The light in my eyes
The sun in my sky
Is now eternally gone
Because of what I ran from

Pre-Chorus
I made a mistake
That I can't fix
Chances I had to take
Didn't work now did it?

Chorus
Is there a way
For me to come back home?
I've gone to the unknown
And i have no where to go
And when i come back
Will you look into my eyes,
Tell me that you cried?
Cuz i was gone so long
And that you care that I've been gone?

Verse 2
The one thing I miss
Was the feeling of your kiss
To be held in your arms
And kept safe from harm
You evoke my emotions
Of love and fortune
But I left those behind
Oh how foolish I've been
The thought of you comes and goes as it may
But my need for you overcomes the pain
The pain of my lost and forgotten soul
Where part of me is no longer whole

Pre-Chorus
I made a mistake
That I can't fix
Chances I had to take
Didn't work now did it?

Chorus
Is there a way
For me to come back home
I've gone to the unknown
And i have no where to go
When i come back
Will you look into my eyes
Tell me that you cried
Cuz i was gone so long
And that you care that I've been gone?

Bridge
Now I've gone this far
Away from the world
Away from you
And this happy girl
I know I messed up
Worse than ever
But I can't give up
On you, not yet
But I just want to know
If there's a way back home
If there's a way for your forgiveness
And without it, I'm lifeless
So tell me, please

Chorus
Is there a way
For me to come back home
I've gone to the unknown
And i have no where to go
And when i come back
Will you look into my eyes
Tell me that you cried
Cuz i was gone so long
And that you care that I've been gone?

End of Song

See, it just doesn't make sense, it just isn't good. I'm stressing so much about it. I was trying to make it about someone who left the one they love, which only made them confused and remorseful. They realized that they shouldn't have left because this person was someone they felt safe with, someone they couldn't love with our, and now they're trying to find a way back to what they used to be.
But idk, id love to know what you guys think.

Published January 16, 2017