Vie ¦ The BrownHousehold Awards

𝑆𝑐𝑖-𝑓𝑖/𝐹𝑎𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑦/𝐻𝑜𝑟𝑟𝑜𝑟 𝑟𝑒𝑣𝑖𝑒𝑤

Judge: AgentRomanoff12

Someone is here by Jenisundar
Title 4/5
Cover 3/5
Blurb 1/5
Prologue -/5
Grammar 2/10
Plot 5/10
Character Development 1/10
Flow of the story 2/5
Creativity 1/5
Interest 2/5
Overall opinion 3.5/10
Total 24.5/75

It needs a lot of work. The title fits, considering how this is a horror story but every horror story has a ghost, so it could be more creative. The cover is not really catchy, although it is a bit spooky. The blurb needs to be rewritten.
A dialogue form story, isn't actually a properly written story unless it's a screenplay. So if you're writing a screenplay then yes, you can write in dialogue form but description is needed there too. However this story was plain dialogues. The grammar needs work, there is a need to not generalize it with other horror stories and the story needs to fix it's character development by giving them more depth. The plot is kinda interesting but not very, and is just as same as any other basic horror story.
I'd love to read more if it's written either in a proper screenplay script or an actual story format. 
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Fated Souls by omlata18
Title 4/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 2.5/5
Prologue 3/5
Grammar 6/10
Plot 3/10
Character Development 2/10
Flow of the story 2/5
Creativity 3/5
Interest 1/5
Overall opinion 5/10
Total 36.5/75

Needs work. It's good to see indian characters and ethnics in fantasy stories but there's so much of work this story still needs. For starters, the cover is beautiful but the blurb needs to be worked on to make it more catchy and interesting. Second, the plot moves way fast making no sense to the character development of the protagonist. And especially the grammar and framing of paragraphs needs practice. I'd say it'll come in time but I did love the new character of being a fae in the story. There needs to be a sense of attachment and sense of suspense and aww to a story which this ones fails to catch. But, it's better than a lot more stories and there's a lot of potential it to
be shaped and well made. I'm pretty sure the story is amazing, just presentation needs to be worked on.

All the best.

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Imperfect Perfect Life by priya_shady
Title 2/5
Cover 3/5
Blurb 2/5
Prologue 2/5
Grammar 4/10
Plot 4/10
Character Development 2/10
Flow of the story 1/5
Creativity 2/5
Interest 1/5
Overall opinion 3/10
Total 26/75

The sub genre is fantasy? Because this story isn't a fantasy one. Also, this story needs a lot of work. Like there's switch of pov from first person to third, there's time switch, there's a lot of grammatical errors and the paragraphs need to be framed well. The plot does sound fun though, and it can be made more witter and funnier by having the badass Prisha as an actual voice like animated Lizzie from Lizzie Mcguire. However, it has to be made presentable in both plot, character Development and grammar.
Practice.

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Spirit of the Rogues by alphaholic
Title 5/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 4/5
Prologue /5
Grammar 8/10
Plot 8/10
Character Development 8/10
Flow of the story 4.5/5
Creativity 5/5
Interest 4/5
Overall opinion 8.5/10
Total 60/75

Amazing. The title fits and it's very intriguing. I love the beautiful cover, makes it more beautiful and interesting. The description causes a little confusion, I think it can be framed a little better but nevertheless it's also apt. There are a few spelling errors especially with the scared and sacred error and minor grammatical mistakes but the plot makes up for it. The plot is new, it's described so vividly and one can imagine it exactly. Kudos to the way it's well described. It's a little more different than normal weres and mate stories and stands out in it's own way.

I'd say this story deserves more reads!

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Intersecting Parallels by 9Worlds
Title 4.5/5
Cover 4/5
Blurb 2.5/5
Prologue 5/5
Grammar 8.5/10
Plot 7/10
Character Development 7/10
Flow of the story 4.5/5
Creativity 4.5/5
Interest 3.5/5
Overall opinion 8/10
Total 59/75 

Your title is very intriguing along with the cover. Your genre is perfectly displayed with both of them. However, the title on the cover could be a bit better and your blurb is very short. It could need some more intriguing and informative hints about the story at that place. You have had a great start but after the Prologue the story seemed to get a back kick. I felt your plot losing the essence and your characters weren't properly relatable. I would advise you to add a character sketch so that it's a better help for the reader and you as well. However, the flow was amazing along with the creativity you put in it.