Hey Der, Ember here, I am FINNALY able to up date a chapter. As far as I know, I'm the Head Game Admin so ya. Ima warn you all, I can get VERY picky for when it comes to OC's and thingy like this.
Shadedusk by: Blackraven157
Shadedusk
Nice name, the beginning of an cats name is either based on their fur (mainly their fur.) or an unusual part of their body, like Brokenstar and Crockedstar, Brokenstar was named well Broken because of his tail was crocked at birth. Crockedstar was named Crocked because of his jaw, (from Storm to Crocked.) Never name the cat from their eye color unless they are joining a clan. But back to what maters, Shade, Ill let it slide. The dusk part too.
37 moons
Not bad for a warrior but for a deputy I understand that he could have just started training the apprentice and he was chosen to be the next deputy because the original one either became the next leader or died. But if non of that did happen an was chose at pick then he should have been like 39 moons cause he should have like JUST gotten an apprentice.
Tom
Ya to many she cats, I may be a female my self, but to many of the OC's are she cats.
Shadowclan
Nice. Normally get ThunderClan.
Deputy
Ok.
Dark grey with black patches and green eyes
Interesting appearance, I can picture it.
Brave and fierce, but he can get easily distracted and can get rlly mean
That's sounds just like me.
Family
Mother: Dawnstorm
Ok
Father: Rowanpelt
Ok
Siblings:died at birth
That's sad.
Back story: When Shadedusk was born none of his siblings survived, his mother was a rouge at that time, so she decided to leave him in the paws of Shadowclan. After he was trusted, Shadedusk began going for deputy. At the time a traitor cat was deputy, he wanted the clan to help him gain others. Later Shadedusk ends up in a huge battle and kills the evil cat. Then later killed himself by rogues
Its a good story plot, only thing is, Tigerstar tried to gain the clans trust and others. But everything else is fine.
Wait, I forgot this part
I give it a of 6/10
ESTÁS LEYENDO
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