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▪ One word lang ang title kaya madaling matandaan, good job on that! It also strongly screams femininity since the word, or name to be exact, is derived from the female lead. I love its simplicity as well since nowadays, most people use extravagant titles although it's unnecessary, in your case, you chose to be simple. The only thing I noticed is, the title you chose somehow doesn't relate to the story's content. Because judging from the first chapter 'til chapter nine, the story revolves around two of the main characters (correct me if I'm wrong) - Leo and Caroline. So hindi siya completely, as in completely'ng umiikot kay Caroline. If ever the story doesn't actually, and completely revolve around Caroline herself, then maybe try to consider changing your title.
BOOK COVER:
▪ The genre of your story is teen fiction, but the cover says otherwise. Hindi ako gaanong naapektuhan sa book cover, kasi sobrang dark niya, o parang hindi magma-match ang color scheme sa genre na gusto mong iparamdam sa mga mambabasa mo. Consider changing the book cover, and try to use (or request for) a more light color that'll definitely scream the teen fiction vibes and at the same time, make (or request for) it more attractive or catchy.
DESCRIPTION:
▪ You delivered your description well, kudos to that! Though there're minimal errors, such as don't address your character focus as "nito". Since si Caroline naman ang pokus mo, puwedeng "niya" na lang. At saka, para sa akin, parang kulang ang intriga at tanong na inilagay mo roon. Parang may kulang pa, hindi ko masabi kung ano. Kumbaga, parang walang bago, kaparehas pa rin ng ibang mga teen fiction na libro. If you want to attract attention, play, and be creative with your words, widen your knowledge.
