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▪ The words used were simple and understandable, and that's good. But the only problem is, it doesn't make any sense as the story's title. Because based on the first chapter until the end, Wrev wasn't slowly fading away. He faded away, literally.
▪ Because on chapter nine, doon ko lang nalaman na panaginip lang pala ang lahat ng iyon. Sa panaginip lang nangyari ang mga bagay na nakasulat sa ibang mga kabanata mo, na ang ibig sabihin ay hindi at kailanlama'y hindi ito magiging totoo. So, bakit "Slowly Fading Away" ang pamagat ng iyong akda? Dahil ba namatay si Wrev? Pero hindi naman siya unti-unting nawala, bagkus ay aksidente siyang nawala nang dahil sa isang 'di inaasahang pangyayari. Him slowly fading away was only based on Lianna's point of view which is only a dream.
▪ I don't think the words you chose for your story isn't accurate to its plot since Wrev didn't literally slowly faded away. I highly suggest you change the title. Try to be creative and play with words that'll reflect your story's plot.
BOOK COVER:
▪ First thing I noticed was the badges/stickers put at the side of your story. Maybe those're winning badges you've won at some awards and congratulations for that. But I don't think it's necessary to put them on your cover. Why? Because they are not a part of your story, and cover. Kumbaga, hindi dapat sila nakalagay roon. Mas mainam siguro kung tanggalin mo na lamang ito, at gumawa ka ng special chapter kung saan doon mo isho-showcase ang mga napanalunan mo.
