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▪ By the word ravaged, it means something severely damaged or ruined. So, if you'll make the title simpler, it'll be damaged kiss (?) And basing from the first ten chapters, the meaning behind the title wasn't that justified at all. Though since it's I only read the early chapters, that much is understandable. However, please provide some foreshadowings as to why the title of the story is like that. Nevertheless the title is interesting for a teen fiction. Kudos to that!
BOOK COVER:
▪ The cover looks simple as it is. It portrays a woman---probably Natasha. However, the cover didn't convey the title. Kumbaga, parang hindi gaanong napanindigan ng pabalat iyong mismong pamagat ng kuwento. So consider changing your book cover and do make sure that it will convey and justify the title of the story.
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