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Story: Ocultar
Author: bangtanrewinds 

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Reviewer: WisnolWeasley

ꗃ﹕❜Title: 4/5 
ꗃ﹕❜ The Title acts as the face of the book and plays a major role to make a book famous. The Writer has done a wonderful job in selecting a very unique and idiosyncratic title for their book. It elegantly tells the reader what the theme of the book is. 

ꗃ﹕❜Cover: 5/10
ꗃ﹕❜ The Cover feels a bit messed up. When you include too many characters on the cover the reader gets confused on who they should follow in the story. Also, the stills provided on the cover are not in sync and feel very random. I would suggest removing Taehyung and Elle from the cover and leaving Occulto untouched. 

ꗃ﹕❜Blurb: 9/10
ꗃ﹕❜The blurb does a fine job of gracefully convincing the reader to read through the chapter. The rhetorical questioning does a great job of building up that mysterious and dark element for the book. 

ꗃ﹕❜Characters and the Plot: 20/20
 The plot of the story is entangled with the fate of the characters appearing in this black magic-themed mystery thriller. The three main leads of the story always feel in their character, which is really brilliant as most of the writers provide their characters with convenient emotions which then gets coined as 'Lazy Writing.' The Plot of the story though simple at first it is really complex, interesting, and allegorical. The reader really is left in a blank space where they have to decide who's the good guy and who's the bad one, which honestly is the best part of the story. 

ꗃ﹕❜Grammar & Vocabulary: 16/30
ꗃ﹕❜This area appears as the black stains on a clean cloth. I felt that the vocabulary of the writer was really good but it could have been better. The writer really knows their way around when it comes to using perfect words for specific occasions. I found a significant amount of mistakes in the book's grammar, both during the direct as well as indirect speeches. Imagine the book to be a huge and linear hollow rod that has a variable thickness. The grammar mistakes done in the relatively broader sections of the road are forgivable as the great and impeccable storytelling takes care of it. But in the narrower sections, the mistakes stick out like a sore thumb. I would suggest the writer read through the texts once again to check for minor spelling mistakes. 

ꗃ﹕❜Pacing and Writing Style: 8/10
ꗃ﹕❜I felt that the overall pacing of the book was alright but there is surely room for improvement. I would like to make a simple suggestion, the scenes where two people interact, for example, Elle and Taehyung or Elle and Yongsun, can be written in the third person as it might provide the reader a 360-degree view of the situation they are reading about. That is how I think of it, at the end of the day it is the writer who knows their audience well and what they like to read. The frequent dreaming sequence where Elle recalled her memories were crafted wonderfully and provided solid support to the story acting as its backbone. 

ꗃ﹕❜Elements I really liked:

₊˚✧ The Solid Quotes present at the beginning of each chapter provide the perfect reflection of what is to come.

₊˚✧ An Extraordinary Prologue, filled with allegories and the reality of the Human Race.

₊˚✧ A dedicated chapter explaining the Vocabulary used in the book, providing the reader a foresight for the book. 

ꗃ﹕❜Overall: 77/100
ꗃ﹕❜The book and the writer themselves have the capability of enchanting the reader to stick with it till the very end. Except for the grammar and spelling mistakes at a few places, I feel the book was great, where I had to really nitpick the writing mistakes, A Really Good Job! I hope that you enjoyed the ride! 

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