"We may not have won any prizes, but we're walking away like champs."
Carnivals, the place for happiness, love and joy. The place for the thrill of adventure, as you venture into with you companions, ready to enter as a player, and walk our as a win...
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ꗃ﹕❜TITLE: 4/5 Simple but regal. It does not play around and goes straight to the topic. Although I would've expected a bit more creativity, but for an olden fantasy, I think it is almost enough.
ꗃ﹕❜COVER: 5/5 One of the best elements that I like about this story is the cover and just how it fits with the theme of the story. Elegant and ornate typography with the perfect colour palette. I don't think it can get any better than this, or I may be wrong.
BLURB (3/5) It's a long one which is rich with information, and this is both a pro and a con. A pro because it does the job of conveying the basic plot, and does so perfectly. But, let's be honest, no one reads a long blurb in its entirety, so why invest so much effort when you can simply reduce a few lines and it'd still be as effective as it was before? Although I do love the distinct vocabulary and besides a few downsides, it's a blurb better than what I've seen majorly.
DAWN: 7/10 Introducing an enticing event right from the beginning of the story was a smart move. It catches the reader in its abruptness and leaves many questions riling in their heads. Although further down the first chapter you kind of rushed it out which may create some confusion so I'd suggest incorporating a bit more on the emotions and the surroundings.
PLOT AND WORLD BUILDING (7/10) An age old story of bloodthirsty dragons (not all of them of course) and their rule over the humans with a twist, the plot is thoughtfully put down and presents its own aspect of fantasy which does not fail to intrigue. Though at times it was a bit vague with presenting Dragonesia and Lumina at its finest, there were still a lot of details.
CHARACTER BUILDING (4/10) The story in itself has me hooked, but I am not able to fully connect with the characters. There is depth and distinctive backstories but there's still a big room for improvement. The characters have gotten a bit cliche over the chapters and I'd love it if you could add some more personality to them.
PACE AND LENGTH (5/10) The pace of the story is uneven, i.e., at times it is slow and takes time to go through the scenes thoroughly, but then other times it is rushed which leaves off several details. However, the length is fine.
VOCABULARY AND GRAMMAR (7/10) There are little to no flaws in the grammar and the vocabulary and the author shows to have a great knowledge of it all. The only lacking part would be the punctuations as the commas are unnecessarily placed at times.
WRITING STYLE (8/10) The writing style has a few switches as the reader proceeds down the chapters, which I've never seen much before but it is honestly very enchanting. It goes from narration to seriousness to humour almost flawlessly and I'd love to see more of this. Again, there were several details left out here and there that are needed to be mentioned.
OVERALL: 80/100 Although the story started off with something which we've seen countless of times before, it definitely made its own name as we moved further down with Alana. It is witty and is definitely a good read if you want to the darker side of dungeons and dragons.
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