"We may not have won any prizes, but we're walking away like champs."
Carnivals, the place for happiness, love and joy. The place for the thrill of adventure, as you venture into with you companions, ready to enter as a player, and walk our as a win...
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ꗃ﹕❜Title: 4.5/5
The title is definitely intriguing. It does justice to the plot of the story too as it suggests what situation the main protagonist must be in, so, overall the title is apt for the story.
ꗃ﹕❜Cover:5/5
I love the cover. It is really nice and aesthetic, it also has all the components which a cover should have, I also like the colour scheme of the cover. So overall it is a great cover.
ꗃ﹕❜Blurb: 3.5/5
Okay, I have to say that this might be one of the nicest blurbs I have reviewed so far. It has all the components of a well written blurb, though it could have been a bit longer in my opinion. I think that you should try and write a few samples which are longer than this one and if you like any of them you can update it, otherwise I think the present blurb does a great job too.
ꗃ﹕❜Opening: 4/5
The opening was a solid 4. As the story starts abruptly with the protagonist finishing a book and not being satisfied with the ending, I think that it is a good way of engaging readers and it also shows how the protagonist doesn't really like the idea of a boring and cliché love story which sets the tone of the story.
ꗃ﹕❜Grammar/Characters: 4/5
The grammar used in the book is fabulous. You have a good knowledge of tenses, prepositions and conjunctions but there are a lot of commas in places where they aren't really necessary. There are a few typos here and there which can be removed by re-reading quite easily. I have to say that your way of writing is fantastic and I really love it. The characters are very well written and you have described them nicely. I love the humour and personality of Oakly, like literally I love her
ꗃ﹕❜Writing Style: 4.5/5
Like I commented above, I like your writing style quite a bit. You describe scenes and characters perfectly and it kept me really engaged in the story.
ꗃ﹕❜Overall: 25.5/30
Overall, I can't comment much on the plot of the story right now since it's still just six parts in but what I can make out by reading them is that the story is going to be really good if you keep up with the good work.
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Note From the Reviewer: Keep up the good work I'll definitely continue reading the story<33
