"We may not have won any prizes, but we're walking away like champs."
Carnivals, the place for happiness, love and joy. The place for the thrill of adventure, as you venture into with you companions, ready to enter as a player, and walk our as a win...
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ꗃ﹕❜Title: 4/5 P
erfect goes along with the overall theme and plot of the book but is a little lengthy.
ꗃ﹕❜Cover: 3/5 Matches the overall theme and Aesthetic of the book and is Aesthetically pleasing but the title could be a little bigger and centered, with a different font.
ꗃ﹕❜Blurb: 3/5 More of an expert from the text and a little long which can turn people off and move them on to the next book. Something short and captivating is what gets people Attention but also reveals a lot about the plot which removes the element of reading it because it feels like you can predict and know exactly what's coming next.
ꗃ﹕❜Hook:3/5 A Little discouraging as we start off with a long description which turns people off again. The hook is what gets people to read what you have the first look at your book after the blurb, with long paragraphs with Description this is sure to turn them off, I suggest shorter paragraphs so you keep your readers engaged.
ꗃ﹕❜Grammar & Spelling: Absolutely perfect! Not a comma out of place and plenty of use of different punctuation marks.
ꗃ﹕❜ Plot: 8/10 An interesting and Intriguing plot and very original with good ups and downs. A quest or a joinery something that's been used before but you have it your own little twist to it and brought it to life.
ꗃ﹕❜Writing Style: 8/10 A nice and original style, a mixture of perfect descriptions with dialogue.
ꗃ﹕❜Writing Flow: 5/10 Perfect flow from each event to the next but at an excruciating slow pace.
ꗃ﹕❜Focus points:
﹕❜Pacing A little slow as I'll mention more about it, A very slow pace due to the amount of description. Slow paced are okay but do frustrate readers and bore them to drop the book.
﹕❜Description Descriptions are on point! They convey exactly what's being described and helps imagine everything perfectly but it's best to balance as the descriptions are a little too much and with that like I mentioned earlier will turn off readers.
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