TDAPD

08. "𝚍𝚎𝚜𝚌𝚛𝚒𝚙𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗𝚜/𝚍𝚎𝚝𝚊𝚒𝚕𝚜" [𝟏]

Okay, for our characters and settings, we need descriptions.

We're making a book. Books have a story that's being told, and in these stories, they have to have characters, and if they have characters, they have to have a look. A look we can imagine, of course.

Some of the people on here fail at describing the look of their characters.

example one
Sometimes I have to stop the food in my microwave and stir it around and put it back in there because that shit don't be hot yet it do all that damn popping though.

Anyway, how rude of me, I didn't even introduce myself. My name is Collardia Greenae Neckbone, I am seventeen years old, and I'm a bad bitch. I stand at 5'4, I'm light skinned and highkey look like a fried Caucasian. I got "Grass Ain't Greener" hazel eyes from my fresh off the boat from Barcelona, Rollercoaster, Ginuwine Anxious, Mexico, mixed with every country that's far away from America daddy and my black momma. I got juicy big lips, big ass titties (a 78ZZZ), a slim, anexoric waist, and a dumb fat, ridiculous booty that sit up real good. My hair is long and thick like a dick, and goes all the way down to the corner store round the way by Ray Ray'nem house.

Cut it the fuck out.

example two
Characters

Dandruffia Coconuit Oila:
17 yrs old
Light skin
Blue eyes
Hair all the way down to her back,
Friends: Chevy, Mercedes, Mitsubishi, Escalade, and Toyota.
Sisters: Jamaiciana Blackish Castoria Oila, Grapseedisha Oila, Marcujia Oila, Teasha Treena Oila

Stop, goddamn it. STOP.

You do not describe a character like this. It's pathetic. This goes for physically describing a character as well as describing a character's life and background.

Think of describing your characters as if you're meeting somebody for the first time. Do they sit and describe themselves like, "Hi, my name is Zakiyah. I'm five feet and ten inches, I have brown skin and brown eyes. My hair is shoulder-length and I have two deep dimples in my cheeks. I was born on November 6th, 1998 and I'm nineteen years old. My mother is black and my father is black too. He was born in Miami, and my mother was born in Georgia. I'm not in school right now but I work and I barely make anything but I'm getting by."

No. People do not sit and describe themselves like this. It's robotic and unnatural, and if you know anybody that describes themselves like this: call up a mental asylum, seal they ass in an envelope and mail they ass off.

When you meet somebody for the first time, they don't physically describe themselves to you; you physically describe them in your mind because you are at looking at them.

In a story, fleshing out character descriptions from multiple characters' viewpoints is helpful. This means you use other characters or a point-of-view to describe a character.

DESCRIPTIONS
IN FIRST & THIRD
POINT-IN-VIEW
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example one [first person point-of-view]

         I push on, moving my legs a little faster as I'm able to now get a better look at his features – a sharp jawline and defined chin with a patch of hair, thin pink lips, a fresh and trimmed mustache, and small, beady dark brown eyes that always hold a glint of mischief.