Author: @IsThisMeeee
Book: Bad Boy With The Blue Bag
The Flow:
Just like the previous book you've written, the flow is good but your sentence structure needs major fixing (spaces, commas, capital letters). It's only the first chapter, so there's not much to say other than the book starts off as cliche - maybe you'll have a twist in your story line when you continue your chapters! Don't drag the events too much, get to the point - because your style of writing is extremely emotive and exaggerated - you don't want to prolong that for the reader. If you want to hook them in you also need to end it with them wanting more!
The Characters who resonated with me:
Faith: She seems cute and a bubbly person at heart. I could feel her energy just by reading her dialogue with her friends (great job!). It's clear that she's impulsive and outspoken, willing to go the extra mile to fulfill her desires. Your character development is really good so far!
Rank: 6.5/10 good luck with the upcoming chapters!
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Reviews and Ranks
RandomI feel like giving constructive criticism. I did this before and then deleted it. Whoever manages to find this, well you're in for an honest but a simple-straight-to-the-point review plus a ranking out of 10 :) ! P.s Votes are given for every chapt...
