Warrior Cat OC Rater (Closed for catch up)

Quailheart

This Oc belongs to Bellaisthebestrus

Name: Quailheart
Sounds nice, and "Quail" isn't overused

Past names: Quailkit, Quailpaw
Makes sense

Name reason: Quails are known to be small and have a brown plumage (color of feathers) which Quailheart literally is small and brown.
A very literal name, but I like it
Quailheart means that he has the heart of a quail. Quails are usually heard but not seen and Quailheart is a voice of reason but doesn't like to take all the clout from the other clan members.
"All the clout" ??
So he's more of an introvert but loves to help his clan.
The reasoning behind "heart" is good

Aprearence: He is a brown glossy tabby. He's little and skinny. Has white fur around the muzzle and down the stomach. His tail has a white tip at the end and if you look closely he has darker brown streaks coming from his eye to the side of his face. (Quails usually have long stripes from there's eyes) He has a few scars on the back of his neck because in fights cats go for the back of his neck to bite. He has yellow eyes coming from his mother's side
Alright, pretty neat description (ew, who says that? 😂) but I'd consider shortening it with commas into a few sentences.

Gender: tom
Mmhmm

Age: 78 moons (6.5 years)
Oh, wow! He's older than a lot of Ocs

Personality: voice of reason, learns quickly, loyal, blunt, introverted, seems too serious, not the best at dealing with loss,
Okay, seems pretty good
and a lil submissive.
Uh, wow- Is it hot in here?
😅🥵😳

Sexuality: big gay
We love that 😌👌

Clan: WindClan
Makes sense why he's named "Quail"

Rank: Warrior
Figured

Mother: Mapleblossom, has silky and glossy dark brown fur. Her eyes are usually in slits that are as yellow as a sunflower.
Mapleblossom is officially the most beautiful name ever and I wish I could steal it（≧∇≦）

The description is nice, thought it could use something extra

Father: Stormfall, A raven black tom that has scars all around his body. His tail has the most scars almost making it look bent. He has cloudy blue eyes.
Does he have cataracts?
Though he pushed him out of his life when he agreed that his brother should be kicked out of the clan.
Okay, so not so nice

Brother: Coal (Coalpaw) a raven black tom just like his father. The name pretty much explains itself. Became a rouge after he was kicked out.
I was right! Though how is he named "Coal?" Unless he was rogue or something before.... becoming a rogue again??
Him and Quailheart used to have a close bond. Always doing clan activities together. He has pale blue eyes. Used to be an extrovert and had the determination to become leader. It explains more of his story in the backstory.
Kk, I'm waiting for it 👀

Crush: Hero
( ^ω^ )

Mate: Hero: a big and broad red/ginger-ish tom.
Uh, Ginger is a red color? Do you mean like a bright ginger, or a russet color?
He's a loner and they meet on Quailheart's adventure to find his brother. He has emerald bright eyes that Quailheart is drawn to.
I suggest re-writing that as "Bright emerald-green eyes" so its easier to read.
He is also drawn to Quail and just wants to help and protect him. Used to be in a home until he wasn't properly well fed and decided to live in the woods to hunt on his own. (Named him hero cuz he kinda died as a hero.)
So, what was he called before that? His name couldn't have been Hero for "dying as a hero" when he was alive. To make more sense, I'd just have his Twoleg given name be Hero