Reviews and recommendation

The 26th of Febrary

By @Nithya2023

This is a romance book. Davian is a boy who run away from his college, coming back home to  his adoptive family and Alayah, his best friend, adoptive sister and maybe something more?

Positive notes

1. Originality
The subject is quite peculiar. It's not clear where the story is heading, making it a continued surprise for the reader
2. Mistery
A soft aura of mystery surrounds the story, making it charming

Neutral Notes

1. Names
I am personally not a fan of weird names. 

First of all, I'm gonna spend the entire book wondering if I'm saying it right in my head. 

Second of all, why? If your character is a demon, a LA boy, a fae, weird names are justified. 

But I've never met people of small town with names that weird.
But it's just personal taste. Weird names contributes to a peculiar mood in the story, and I'm sure I'm 100% going to be submerged by people from small town with weird names, now

Negative Notes

1. Show, don't tell
You say wayy to much in the book.
"Davian was not like other boys. He was handsome..."
Of course, having an handsome main character is pretty much requested.
But beauty is in the eye of the beholder.
Basically, beauty is subjective. Make a character look at them and describe them as they feel. Describe the hair, say what their broad shoulders makes the other feel etc.
The reader will think they're beautiful. If you just say he's handsome, the reader will just think something along the lines of "yeah, of course. Cringe."
(I'm a cruel reader, don't worry. Not every one thinks like that.)

2. Visual
You use short sentences, which is perfectly alright.
But short sentences in big block exhaust the reader's eyes on the long.
Try breaking the blocks with a few empty lines, the page will appear much lighter.
I would also add a couple of images.

In general:
Keep it on! The story looks interesting ;)