Sugarbabes Round Robin Reading Group [Closed Group]

⚾Assignment 9

SO SORRY THIS IS SO LATE! There's an old saying about when life gives you lemons, you should make lemonade. I'm having a bit of a problem finding the recipe. Will do my best to be on time next week.

We had our first Book of the Month! Just wondering how everyone felt about it? Is it a keeper? Mega thanks to everyone for reading and a bigger thanks to @DelaneyBrenna for being our first victim... uh, I mean, book! 😜

Mega thanks again to PVChan01 for volunteering to double this week! You are a champ! If anyone else can double till our beloved Saiki returns, let me know.

If anyone has any problems, notes, or wants to list changes, a contest they are in... ANYTHING... let me know. We aim to please! 

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Constructive criticism is a helpful way of giving feedback that provides specific, actionable suggestions. Rather than providing general advice, constructive criticism gives specific recommendations on how to make positive improvements. Constructive criticism is clear, to the point, and easy to put into action. Some might want more general things, like is it interesting and others, much more detailed IF the reader is so inclined.

Please check for things your assigned partner is looking for below:

*@BlameSaiki - Would like to know if the story is enjoyable and if the reader would like to go deeper. If not, what turns people away? What is the story missing?

@RogueWriter55 - Would like to know if the story is interesting, clear, and concise. PLEASE, point out any typos or parts that sound like an IKEA manual written in Swedish. (Translation: it's not clear) I'll take any advice I can get.

@DelaneyBrenna - Would like her partner to keep an eye out for repetition with information/descriptors.

@KitCatK8 - Requests any and all feedback, no need to pull punches. Is the writing enjoyable, clear, and concise? Are they grammatical errors or typos? Does the story cause any type of emotional reaction? Any suggestions on wording, grammar, and spelling are always welcome. The main question is: Does the story hold your interest? Why or why not? What are your thoughts/theories/feelings about the main character? Is he relatable? Is he believable? Opinions are welcome on what would make the story better.

@PVChan01 - Would like partners to comment about how engaging and enjoyable they find the story and characters. Please keep an eye out for repetitiveness or awkward sentences. Look out for any big grammar mistakes like misspelled words.

@juliecotewriter - Would love any kind of feedback/editing with an eye toward feedback on the worldbuilding. Mainly things in the genre of, does it make sense and feel realistic, or are there places that should be explained more, or things that seem to contradict.

@SGSchumpertWrites – Wants to be critiqued on everything. Tear it apart (kindly :). If a character is unrelatable, if the dialogue sounds off, if you're getting bored, or feel like the plot is structured strangely, if something doesn't make sense, please tell me. I also tend to overwrite, so if you could help me trim down and cut out unnecessary bits/scenes, which would be lovely. I request no critiquing on grammar/spelling errors since a computer can point out those. Thank you so much for your time and thoughtful consideration. I look forward to working with y'all!

@aditibalaji100 - What I'm looking for: I'd love to get input mainly on the characters and the world-building. I'd love to know both, what's working and what's not. I'd also appreciate help with rephrasing stuff to make it sound sharper and easier to read.

*Hiatus

PAIRINGS

📕 Remember to comment whatever you like by your group when done because I lost this battle LONG AGO. (DelaneyBrenna and KitCatK8... I'm waving the white flag. I surrender!... for now.  😈)

📗Minimum is two chapters, four inline comments, and a few lines at the end of the second chapter on what you thought, impressions, etc.

 KitCatK8 [Fallen's First] - RogueWriter55 [The Clearing]

SGSchumpertWrites [Paint Me a Sinner, Paint Me a Saint] - DelaneyBrenna [Hooked ONC 2021] *checked, it's there

aditibalaji100 [The Pox Ridden] - PVChan01 [The Wild Card's Queen]

juliecotewriter [Wanderlust] - PVChan01 [The Wild Card's Queen]

NOTES:

*Crickets... tumbleweed