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On Splashing! On Dashing! On Thrashing and Slashing! We got a Smashing to do!
Sorry it took so long to get to this, but that is life. Spent December and the first part of January with The-Unspecified-Virus-Of-Unknown-Origin and even since then have had little energy or motivation to do anything short of hibernate. So while I cannot promise to do another smashing for a while, at the very least I had the time, focus, and peace of mind to look at a piece of work and judge it on its own merits.
I read about 12 chapters out of 39. Still not half-way, but covered a good portion of the start, and I found I had enough to say as it was. If I kept going I am sure there would be more to say, and this review would be more valuable as a result, but most of it would just be beating a dead-horse as I have a good sense of fundamental issues that will have a long-term affect on the story. The story is still ongoing and I get the sense it will go on for many chapters because these 12 chapters was just the part that introduced some characters to each other.
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TLDR; Street urchin gets adopted by a litter of armor-wearing puppies
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Other - Unprofessional - Including quotes from out-of-universe people is bad. It would be fine and enriching for the world if the quotes were from in-universe, but this isn't. That pulls you out of the immersion. I really hope this is just a Wattpad thing, and you will burn this to the ground if you want to publish it on any platform where money becomes a possibility. This will not affect the overall review because I don't think this is a lasting thing and will likely be removed if the author decides to take the story in a more professional direction.
