Oc Reviews

Ghost [Creepypasta Oc]

Name: Ghost

Looks: bird like in figure/skinny, she is very pale almost transparent, she has completely white eyes no pupil and has two scars forming an X over her left eye (represents slender symbol) has dark grey hair is often seen with a bored look

I'm pretty sure the operator symbol means you're against him. I might be wrong so eh you should look into that

Weapon: her main weapon is a double bit axe named sunshine but she prefers to kill with her bare hands

Yesss no knives

Abilities: she is dead so she cannot be killed, she can hover 2 feet off the ground on any surface and can walk through walls

Eh.. A little op. But she is a ghost so.

Personality: she is very at ease with her insanity and often toys with people for her own amusement she gets bored quite easily
She is slightly bipolar going from happy to furious easily she enjoys playing with people mainly men for again her own amusement

Watch out for the whole "insane" and "bipolar" stuff. If you do it right I don't mind. Just make sure there are valid reasons.

Backstory:

She was born during the late 1700 and lived to the age of 16 before an occult which worshipped the slender man kidnapped her carving an X over her left eye and putting a steak through her heart instantly killing her.

I would change the age to like--

23? Or something idk

she awoke dead with no memories of her past life. Insanity took over which lead to her killing each of the occult members one on each night for 34 days.

Hmm.. If she's a ghost can she even go insane? XD

She then began wandering America for over a thousand years (now the 1800) killing whoever in her path she was lonely and she thought of the world as dull until she came across and axe which she fell in love with deciding that it was her sunshine in her world of grey.

Glad the weapon part was explained

She soon met the slender men and a friendship was born the slender man gave her the name 'ghost' as she was still nameless and introduced her to his brothers and the creepy paster world but ghost soon had to leave as zalgo was Pursuing her (he wanted her to bear his children). She hid for over 2 thousand years before finally deciding to find her old friend the slender man and his notorious slender mansion for her own amusement.

The slender mansion isn't cannon, plus canon creepypasta interacting with ocs is a sin. Unless it's in like a fan fiction :33

Overall:

This oc is pretty creative. Although some things need to be changed.

I like the back story expect for the interaction with canon creepypasta.

I would definitely change the age, and do some research.

She has great potential, you can easily make her more original.

It's really good that she isn't human though. I find her creepy, which is good.

Creepypasta: scary stories on the internet

You got the scary part covered my friend :^)

85% Original

15% Changeable