Oc Reviews

SplitTail [Warrior Cat Oc]

Fandom: Warrior Cats

Name: SplitKit, SplitPaw, SplitTail

Appearance: He has grey fur that is so light it's almost white with soft bluish-grey and dark grey splotches. He has light blue eyes. (now this is where it gets wierd) He has two tails due to some genetic deformity and is kinda small.

I wouldn't make him have a split tail, although it seems cool it's really rare. And I'm pretty sure most of the cats born with split tails don't survive long after birth. But I'm not an expert on cats or deformations.

Clan: Riverclan (formerly Thunderclan)

Family: mother: LeafSplash-alive dad: OakShard-alive older sister: LightFlight twin brother: FoxPaw-dead

Backstory: SplitTail was somehow born with two tails. (dont ask me, ask a scientist. all I know is that its possible) His mother and father were disgusted, but pampered his 'perfect' twin brother, who was his only friend. Even his older sis hated him. His parents decided to throw him out of the clan at 6 moons, the age of an apprentice. He stumbled through the forest for a while before he collapsed by a river. He woke up in the Riverclan medicine den. His first reaction was to run, but he soon discovered that Riverclan was much nicer than his home. Of course, he still got bullied. His mentor was a tom named SilverClaw. He quickly became friends with many of the Riverclan cats and still resents his family for what they hatred

Personality: Shy, separation anxiety(with cats he trusts), emotional, easily emotionally hurt, a bit outgoing and silly with his friends, eyes Thunderclan cats with a burning hatred

Makes sense according to his background.

Likes: winter, cold, water, blue and grey, exploration, study of medicine, stories, looking at the night sky, peace and quiet

Dislikes: Thunderclan, summer, heat, rats, blood, death, loud noises, stressful situations, battle

Skills: Quiet, quick, fast thinker, creative, smart with medicine

Flaws: Afraid to kill(except Thunderclan), no sense of direction, kinda clumsy

Being clumsy isn't a flaw .3.

Friends:
AcidPaw/AcidWing- small energetic she-cat with light grey fur that has leaf green stripes and bright green eyes. (Warrior)

DewPaw/DewDrop- medium shy she-cat with lighter than AcidWing's grey fur with light bluish-grey spots and dark blue eyes. (Medicine cat)

NightPaw/NightShine- tall mellow tom with white fur with one pitch black front paw and mercury silver eyes. (Outsider-->Warrior)

Sexuality: hides that he's Bi and prefers guys

*would be happy but doesn't know if that's possible*

Relationships: he just has friends :p

Overall:

I like that his family makes sense, at least one of your family members are bound to die if you're in a clan.

But if I were you I would change the split tail thing, or so more research about it. When making ocs don't give it traits that are extremely rare in real life. But you don't want them to be unoriginal. So when I make ocs I tend to give them traits that only 1/50 decent ocs have. That way it's not too common and Mary Sue-ish, and it's not too rare.

95% original

5% changeable