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When Dreams Come True

Title- When dreams come true

Author- Willow_Avenue

I was given this chance to review your book. Its a tough job, man. Oh , i forgot its a girls-only group. So, tough job 'woman'. XD

So lets start by giving some ratings-

Title- i think the title is okay. But it would be better if you come up woth a unique one. Cos this title is very common. So ,
3.5/5 . (:
Plot- its nice. I liked it. I loved it ;)
Ratings- 4/5
Cover- umm, i'm sorry. I think you can put something more creative , and something which goes with the title and theme. Ratings- 3/5
(Sorry)
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So, your story starts with riya, who is going to IIT mumbai with her cousin sakshi.

interesting !
I really liked the way you started your story.

My hopes are high because of your story. Maybe, i'll find my 'vishal' in the college i'll go :p

Okay, so back to the reviewing thing.. i really liked 'chapter 20'. Romance ♡♡♡♡♡♡♡

Even though i had a little hint of how the story will end, the way you've written the ending is superb. That letter was heart breaking. I actually cried. (I'm very emotional. Hehe)
You can't imagine how chapter 31 filled me with sorrows. And plus, 'can't forget you' by arjun was playing on my music player. So all the emotions doubled up.

I want to give you 10/10 for this chapter. ♡♡♡♡♡♡

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IMPROVEMENTS-
Though, their are not any major changes to be made, but still this story would be super amazing if you improve in these areas-
1. GRAMMATICAL ERRORS- i couldn't find too many grammatical errors . But still, there are some grammatical errors which are easily noticable. I know you'll get rid of them once you'll go through your story.
2. SENTENCE FORMATIONS- I could see how gradually the story improved from chapter 1 to chapter 34 . The starting chapters could have been written in a better way . Just go through them once.
3. The story got a little confusing in some chapters. But still you managed to complete the story in a beautiful way.
4. Your story was the first story i've ever read in present tense. I was not sure whether it is correct to right a story in present tense. So, i spent 3 hrs on this. And finally, i got to know that its your own wish. We can write story in either past tense or present tense.
There are some places where you've mixed past tense and present tense.  Please take a note of them.
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Overall ratings- 4/5
(Good job, girl)
Well, i actually fell in love with your story. I will definitely recommend it to my friends.
P.S - i miss vishal :(

I hope you are not angry. I just told you what i felt .

Thanks !
Have a great day ahead.

Reviewer- navikaur373