Title: A...British Exchange Student?!
Length: 2 pages
Genre: Anime Fan Fiction
Status: ONGOING
Rate: PG
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I'm liking the whole idea of the fan-fiction, it's like I'm reading a manga :D The dialogue is active and so are their personalities! I liked Marie's personality: she may be attractive but still has that side of complaining and getting nervous around boys XD The things you could fix are pretty simple. Grammar mistakes are pretty evident, but I'm glad you paid attention to what you were typing because there are some pretty simple-minded people out there (don't judge! O.O). They all are just punctuation errors, not grammar. Second thing, when I read the 2nd chapter, the POV suddenly switched from 3rd to 1st person. You could either notify the reader that this is happening or change the POV's. And lastly, you should add more detail than just dialogue. Fan-fiction is descriptive as it's a story, too :3
Rating: 3.5 out of 5
This is an early-bird fanfiction, but it'll strengthen overtime! :DD And sorry this review was published a week later! >_<
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