Title: Through His Eyes ➸ harry au
Length: 7 pages
Genre: 1D Fan-Fiction Romance
Status: ONGOING
Rate: PG-13
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So this was my first time reading a 1D fan-fiction, and it was quite an interesting read for a first. You have the bad boy character already placed in, yet the girl character is different. She is introverted yet she bears the wild side that's totally opposite from the typical Good Girl. The personalities of these teenage characters fit them very well, but you might fix some of their language. As mischevious and rebeliious as they sound, some of their sentences sound too formal. I suggest adding shorter words and contractions: "I do not know," He states, giving me one last shrug..." (Chapter 1). Also, there are some grammatical errors like punctuation, not a biggie on words, though. Anyhow, the pace of the story is good. For a fan-fiction, it's not too slow or fast, so you're not rushing the relationship between the main character and Harry. I would just warn you not to add cliche things into your story. A little would be fine, but with a story like this, too much would destroy its uniqueness.
Rating: 4 out of 5
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