Title: The Nice One (Harry Styles au.)
Length: 64 pages+
Genre: 1D Fan-Fiction Romance
Status: ONGOING
Rate: PG-13
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The first chapter didn't seem at all cliche to me nor it wasn't a filler neither, so the introduction gave good hints for the future of the story. Alright, the main character is the average good girl, but she's innocent and it's interesting how she interacts with the uncomfortable subjects and people around her ^^ It makes for a cool read. Because this is a 1D fan-fiction, there are going to be a lot of characters including 5 boys readily shot out in one chapter, so be sure you don't confuse the reader (maybe not 1Der's, I think they know every boy ^^), yet you're doing a great job at keeping track of characters. Speaking of characters, Jordan's character is sweet and down-to-earth, and although she's the biggest good girl I've read so far, I like that she's responsible and courageous enough to even approach a fight ^^ This fan-fiction is simple and enjoyable for anyone whose a 1Der and those looking for some drama! XD
So the story overall is fine, it's just the way the seniors speak among themselves. For instance, I know that Jordan's a nice character, it'd probably be best if she had contractions in her dialogue; "I am" to "I'm". Also, I find punctuation errors about every 1-3 paragraphs/sentences: spaces after quotations, capitalization marks, and comma mistakes. They're fixable with a stroke of a keyboard!
Rating: 4.6 out of 5
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