The entries I had received were very detailed and exciting, however I noticed a slight decrease in entries turned in...
Don't forget, your chance of death increases if you don't turn in entries!
Any who, lets see how you did!
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Tribute 2: Mai Li
Score: 10
Feedback: I liked the introduction, where it showed your character learning to get used to throwing knives. I also appreciated your character's opinion of Amber throughout the entry, like how she started to seem suspicious and then redeemed herself by saving another tribute. Good job!
Tribute 3: Skye Finley
Score: 0
Feedback: No entry.
Tribute 4: Neha Bhavsar
Score: 0
Feedback: No entry.
Tribute 6: Aime Satomi
Score: 0
Feedback: No entry.
Capitol 1: Gus Octavius
Score: 7
Feedback: I thought the entry was a little fast paced, but I enjoyed the humor of Popsy aging backwards. The fact that Gus is the only boy makes your character seem like a "father hen" I guess in this entry, as you are constantly running from Skye to Popsy frantically.
Capitol 2: Vix Rojas
Score: 8
Feedback: I liked the use of detail, and the use of flashbacks that trigger because of Gus. The only thing was that the two tribute's death were cut off a little early, but other than that the entry was great!
Capitol 3: Luna Jordan
Score: 10
Feedback: What made your entry unique was that you included the psychological effect that your character endured during the process of the two tribute's deaths. I liked how a combination of the past events as well as the recent one has caused your character to develop a sense of self-doubt. Well done.
Capitol 4: Popsicle X
Score: 0
Feedback: No entry.
Capitol 5: Amber Dauntless
Score: 0
Feedback: No entry.
Capitol 6: Berenice Vipointe
Score: 10
Feedback: Despite what you mentioned of your entry being shorter, it was still really detailed! I liked your use of Chinese during the entry, so I even translated it for you!
我很想吧她打死 = I wanted it killed her (It kinda fits)
我说，我很想吧她打死 = I said, I would like it killed her (Yep. It fits)
闭嘴 = To shut up (Wow that fits like a jigsaw puzzle)
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Author Games: Renegade | CLOSED
Random(CLOSED) The tributes have escaped. A Gamemaker is captured. The Capitol is slowly turning to chaos. With the help of a few outsiders, and the rumor of a secret rebel group's base, will the remaining tributes of the 80th Games be able to make it to...
