Reviewed by Khloe
STORY by fuzzypaws123
Cover
I think the cover goes well with the whole vampire part but nothing about a prince, maybe you could have a vampire looking guy stood there in the shadows? It's just a thought though.
Description
I find the description very confusing, maybe you could tone it down a little bit I don't know just for me it's confusing. And also add in what age this takes place in so if it is modern day or olden day please.
Story
I am on chapter 2 currently and I am very confused as to what is a dream, what is a memory and what happened with the tarot cards. Can you add in so that it makes more sense for readers?? Okay, I think this story could be very good but you need to make it less confusing and make sure it all makes sense as I am struggling to keep up.
From Me
I think that you do have a talent and I think maybe you should go over and make sure that everything makes sense. Keep writing though :)
Khloe
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