Yes indeed YES INDEED! A Naruto fanfic has been chosen for our first critique. Naruto was the first anime we watched so it only seemed appropriate. We'll be scouring Wattpad for gut-wrenching Mary Sues to add to this book of atrocities. So prepare y...
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Ladies and gentlemen! Boys and girls! Otaku and weaboos alike! MILO IS BACK. I REPEAT. MILO HAS RETURNED TO MARY SUE KILLING.
Ayyyyyeeee. I'm here!
FINALLY. I am way more excited about this than I probably should be.
Oh buddy, me too.
Anyways, today we have a killing that's a bit special. We received our first suggestion from one of our followers; fandom_otaku0735. The suggested target is called The Angel of Konoha by GuardianKey_Luna. Our follower was nice enough to leave a quick description of the Sue, which reads as follows: "This oc has two tailed beasts in her, is the sister of sakura, and has fanboys..."
As you can imagine, I had to take a look at this one. Luckily, Milo will be helping me slay this cringey, over-powered Sue.
This story starts off with a character description. Feel free to skip this part if you're looking to read our review for the story.
Name: Tenshi Haruno
Meaning: Angel Spring
Alright. Let me explain how Japanese works real quick. In Japan the first and last names of people are switched, so it would be Haruno Tenshi. Normally I would just ignore the fact that the OC's first and last names were backwards. It's an English story, but a translation problem arises when you treat her name like you would in English.
Kill it Tanuki.
Masashi Kishimoto chose names wisely when he created Haruno Sakura. If you break her name down you get two distinct words; Haru (spring) and Sakura (cherry blossom). As you can see Haruno does not mean spring. The no part of Sakura's last name means field. So Tenshi Haruno could either mean Spring's Angel or Angel Field. Shout out to avocado-pie for the correction. I can read very few kanji so I set up my computer to change it into hiragana automatically, missing the fact that the "no" part of Haruno wasn't a possessive particle.
Expertly explained Tanuki and I really like that translation more too.
Moving on.
She put the Japanese characters in there, which are correct as far as I can tell. I appreciate the accurate use of Japanese here.
Age: 11 (a year younger than Sakura)
Looks: Long straight dark purple hair, piercing and hypnotic blood red eyes, very pale almost white flawless skin,
