Book Reviews! (CLOSED)

An Acquired Taste

Novel by indecsion9
Genre: Short Story

Cover: The cover is very simple but cute, however the font you used looks a bit squished which ruins the effect you have on the cover. I recommend choosing a new font.

Summary: Your description is short, but to the point. It seems to be written very well except for the first sentence which is located below.

This sentence is a run on sentence. You can either place a semicolon after grass or rephrase it to say, "Charlie notices a Native Canadian girl one day, sitting in the grass watching the soccer game after school."

Characters: When it comes to short stories it's a lot harder to portray your characters in such a way that the readers will actually enjoy them, but you have done it perfectly. I was instantly pulled in by this mysterious girl that comes into play in the first chapter.

I was also intrigued by Charlie himself, you just depict him in such a way that makes me like him. So your descriptions are amazing. Keep it up :)

Plot: Although I'm not quite sure where this story is heading I do enjoy the fresh twist of originality. By this I mean that, yes, I've seen stories much like this one, but yours stands out. You managed to give it this pizzazz that no else could. So YAY! :D

I really enjoyed the way you transitioned from character to character, but I did find it a bit repetitive. Every time you transition you happen to say the same things. Try to prevent this from happening very often as it ruins the flow of the story.

Grammar: In the first five chapters I read there wasn't that much grammar issues. Just small little things that can easily be overseen. For instance on Chapter 1 you write this:

The underlined section is a bit confusing to read, it's grammatically correct, but you need to rephrase it. Maybe write it like this:

";lips dark, accompanied with a scar on the left side of her cheek"

Take out the comma and the word "and"
and replace it with a semi-colon, it allows the sentence to flow better.

Also on chapter two you write this:

The bottom quote isn't capitalized. The smallest mistakes can have the most impact so keep an eye out for those...and that's it.

I couldn't find any more mistakes. Which is... suspicious... 😑

Extra Info You Might Want to Know (not really):

I've got nothing :/

JUST KIDDING! I totally ship them both! :) What's their ship name?

Ciara
Narlie

Wow those are terrible.... MOVING ON!

Note from me!

I really enjoyed reading your story. It was written very well and it only had few mistakes. I would gladly recommend it to anyone who basically likes to read :)

Comment what you thought of the review. If you need another one wait one week. Until next time!

-Esmer