Ghost
by @NiallHoranFan06
Hook and structures
It's another fan fiction. I still try to get into them, but I see no appeal in them, especially if I have no knowledge of the characters. What I can say, other than not getting pulled into the story, is that there were a lot of run-ons and fragments. Pay attention to those commas and their rules. Other than this, grammar was fine. The story itself was decent. The layout put me off-guard. The time skips messed with my mind, and at one point the dialogue was written in an odd way. I'd say just keep writing to those fans who know of the story, as it wasn't bad.
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RandomWhat you need to know: 1. Must be your own work obviously 2. Everything I say is constructive criticism. I will be honest. (Here's a secret: There's no such thing as a perfect story) 3. I'm open to fan fiction. It'll just take me a while to review...
