"I will be in tune enough to know how far to go."
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Mi Vino by Annalious
148 Reads, 52 Votes, 23 Chapters as of 4/8/21
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I love your choice of cover and title and I'm really happy to read a beautiful story/poem about Yoongi. However, I have no idea how to judge poetry so I can only say if it moved me or not.
I found the story sad and with too many unanswered questions.
In chapter 19, I think it would sound better to say Yoongi carried her to their bedroom...
In chapter 20, did he leave her or did she leave him? It's hard to understand.
It sounds as if she died. What did he do to make her die and why did she hate him? You say he drank but that doesn't explain it well. I think you can go into more details.
Although I enjoyed your short story, I'm glad there is a new part because I didn't understand some of it. I liked how there were surprising twists and I did want to continue till the end.
Keep going! It's a great idea.
-- Sugasluv
